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Forget me Not
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Forget me Not |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Forget me Not I lay upon a field of doubt Forget me not grow round about I fleece the petals one by one Until each flower nude and done. She flew beyond my net of catch No matter how I let or stretch Genuflect my head to clover Tried to be a Casanova. I tried to do what seemed was right? Swore in the sun and moon by night I could not sail upon her sea Nor could I sell the suit of me. I let her drift just drift away Perhaps we’d meet another day. Perhaps she’d have a change of heart Perhaps, perhaps, a brand-new start. So here I lay a field of doubt Fleecing forget me not about. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
She loves you - She loves you not - She loves you - She loves you not - She loves you.... How could she not, dear Sy???.... Neat poem, my dear friend..  Waft every crest upon your destined sea. Embrace the Wave of Serendipity, Lest its elusive arcane ecstasy Refurl with sail for all eternity. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I really like this! Even if it is plaintively sad. My favorite line is the one to rhyme with clover, he he, you Cassanov(er), my mind said. he he he he he he |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Oh my... I love this, ~sigh~...but I hate the word "perhaps", it seems to get in my way all the time.. ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I tried to do what seemed was right? Swore in the sun and moon by night I could not sail upon her sea Nor could I sell the suit of me. I let her drift just drift away Perhaps we’d meet another day. Perhaps she’d have a change of heart Perhaps, perhaps, a brand-new start. So here I lay a field of doubt Fleecing forget me not about. =================== now WHO could forget you???? if "she" did ... it could only be ... she never read your poetry. For once kissed by your rhyme .. you could never be out of sight or out of mind. *winkiewinkie* and how cool is this line.... "I fleece the petals one by one Until each flower nude and done." WAAAAY COOL ... thats how  Me thinks in this garden ... forget is a weed  Heaven bound on wings of love, there's so much that you can rise above. I surrender heart and soul, sacrificed to a higher goal. ~DepechMode~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
when you write, and write like this forget-me-nots will not forget for in the nude, they received your kiss and forget they not, a moment's bliss... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Oh pretty lady Nancy You always tickle my fancy. *L* Sy Vas, Oh you mean casanova in the clover. LOL Nkad, A pound of perhaps and a pound of maybe and you got a good shot at the lottery. Thanks for the read. JM, Your the GREATEST. Winkiewinkie Stinky Sunshine, Never thought of it that way. *L* |
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