Open Poetry #12 |
Modal Misery |
OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Modal Misery When I climb my Abalone, fretwired ladders of fixation, I find you there, Harmony, Hanging double string bent, Callous and cuticle torn, You mimic my dorian tumblings, Into chaos, Cacophony, I lose the plot, Heart to fingertips, Misguided, Bamboo raps on white knuckled dexterity, Bleeding, suffocating, scalic conformity, Until you entice, Lifting me, Beyond the learning, beyond "the dots", Chasing the maple fear, in a wave, Lock fits key, in minor complexity, And we are free. Olias |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
sounds like some good guitar sounds to me, Sir.... or am I mistaken? |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
What a great use of language in this! Corinne |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Sunshine, Thanks for your reply, love guitar, hate practise, those little slices of monotony drive me crazy lol. Regards Olias. Corinne, Thank you for your welcome reply I appreciate it, you are very kind. Take care, Olias |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
well..this is great...it requires 2nd and 3rd readings... into the library it goes. Only thing that puts me off is the capitalising of every line...I feel it would flow more without the block effect. What do you think? K |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Severn, Your very kind thank you for your comments and your quite right about the upper case at the beginning of every line, its a throw back from school days that I can't seem to shake and it interrupts the flow, I've just stuck a post-it onto my monitor to remind me, thanks once again. Regards Olias. |
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