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Orange Jello
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Orange Jello |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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So, I’m sitting here consuming my (personal) daily allowance of sustenance - a little mound of jello Fat-free, sugar-free Only 10 calories and I can’t help but wonder... "What on earth IS the nutritional value of Yellow number 5 and Red number 3?" I’m still hungry Though, for what, I don’t know. I can rock here, enclosed by walls, unsubstantial and actually hear the rain calling me. It patters on the window quietly deafening Challenging me to dare the torrents. But, I’m tired. Weary of waking up each day, and with my little white make-up sponge, smearing on another smile. No, I’m happy – really. Stuffed full, to the gills with the past. And had I the willpower I would vomit those memories Let go of that initial look of disappointment. I think that pains me the most that unforgettable look. And the rain that pitter-patter-smack tells me to chin-up tells me what a great personality I have. Somehow, somewhere watching this glittering orange surface jiggle and undulate my emotional stomach screams out in double-me-over cramps hunger pangs and somehow I don’t think jello will suffice |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I was expecting humor and found a rich, in-depth piece here. I truly enjoyed it and yes, it was a little humorous! It had everything. Thought provoking and insightful read, thank you! "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent poem! I think you hit that nail square on, but don't let the reflection of you in someone's eyes become your goal. The reflection of your heart is more important. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I so relate to where you are. My mind doesn't see me as the people who love me do. [This message has been edited by JLR (edited 02-06-2001).] |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
EXCELLENT!!!!!!!! I LOVED this! Wonderful writing. I'm saving this.  To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wonderfully written piece with a dash of a sense of humor.I like it....brilliant piece! Nathan |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It has no nutritional or redeeming value.. purely empty calories... for sure..  |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Hail Tortilla, Queen, Long Be Your Reign! (but seriously, lay off the mutant spinach) Lines that hit me like napalm(  ):~ smearing on another smile. ~ (the whole stanza, really, but this line esp.) ~ my emotional stomach screams out in double-me-over cramps hunger pangs and somehow I don’t think jello will suffice ~ BAM! But an acid that saddens, and yes, I know too, too well... you nailed it, what I've felt a million times and have to vomit out in dream-words (because I can't write "real" ... it's all smudged and imageryed). What I still feel over and over so,*SUPERHEROHUGS* And, yeah, just so you know to the point of excessive reinforcements, I will ALWAYS be honest. p.s. CHEESE! ROTFL! |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Kathleen, you are a dear - thank you for such a thoughtful reply. Sharon, are you EVER wrong? *sigh* thought not.JLR, I just don't know what to say. That's terrible. Thank you very much for taking the time to reply. I think there's a little bit in us all, that doesn't see the reflection in the mirror (internal, as well) for what it is. dreamkeeper, thank you ND, I don't know about brilliant, but thank you non-the-less! Nan, That's exactly what my stomach said!  Beth!  See what it did? Too much spinach can ruin a complexion! (my torilla is so soft, though) *Superherohugs* right backatcha. Me crime-fighting fellowette! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"Weary of waking up each day, and with my little white make-up sponge, smearing on another smile. No, I’m happy – really. Stuffed full, to the gills with the past." WOW!!! I don't know what to say, but I'm glad to have read this ~*applauds*~ "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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