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jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2001-01-11 11:06 PM

Sand-Walking

Sometimes she'd take my breathe away
when she smiled.
We'd go sand-walking
and her footprints would linger
far longer than mine,
the sand holding her close
as long as it could.
We'd hold hands,
sit on the rocks,
watch the sun set,
listen to seagulls hidden in the dark,
waves breaking on the rocks below,
the sea rubbing it's cheek on the sand.
Moonlight would touch her hair,
angel-glow her cheeks;
sometimes we'd sit all night
whispered words keeping us close,
holding the moment,
lingering over the feeling
that we were essential to the whole.
Sometimes she'd take my breathe away,
as now,
while sand-walking I spread her essence
between the sand and the sea,
returning her forever,
to sand-walking,
through eternity.

w. james beard, jr.
© January 2001

[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 01-12-2001).]

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

1 posted 2001-01-11 11:34 PM

jwesley,

When a smile is forever . . .
I really like this piece, well done!

And I know this woman . . . her smile.

Krawdad

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

2 posted 2001-01-12 12:51 PM

Jwesley--Lovely write. Enjoyed the read.

Poeminister

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

3 posted 2001-01-12 01:03 AM

Absolutely tender and beautiful.
It seems to me, though the responses of the others lead me to believe they did not see the same thing as I did, but it seems that you have had to completely let her go the 'sand-walking for eternity.' My perception is that her ashes have joined the sand and the sea. Is this your intent; is this what really had to happen for you and her? Powerfully poignant closure.

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

4 posted 2001-01-12 01:11 AM

Like Vas...I too read it as she was gone...one again with the sand and sea...beautifully written

Lady Lightning
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 422
Kentucky

5 posted 2001-01-12 01:27 AM

Yes, Like VAS and Paula I got the same impression..You let her go to the sand for all eternity...This is a lovely, though sad poem ....I really liked it... Hugs... ~LL~

The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

6 posted 2001-01-12 01:47 AM

Not THAT clueless, ok?
"When a smile is FOREVER", she is gone.
And having said that, "I know this (universal) woman . . . her smile".

BTDT

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

7 posted 2001-01-12 01:53 AM

James...as usual you paint such tender and lovely images and recollections with your words. Only one that was truely caught up in the moment could do that and then bring it to us to share so wonderfully. This shows the love and commitment that you are willing to give and share. Excellent piece my friend.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2001-01-12 10:32 AM

Thank you all for the read and words. VAS was dead on (no pun meant here) with the read, but I read krawdad's "smile" the way it was meant too. This is what makes it even more "fun" isn't it?

And Mark...thanks for the kudo's.

jwesley

Sunshine

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