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Shadow's Fire
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Shadow's Fire |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I pledge in verse, bestow my troth. Words bellow breath unto my fire. Afix my eye 'pon distant star, in mournful weep of scorn's cruel hand. O Minstrel, may you come to sing, igniting spark, my soul, ascend... Withered hope of joy ascend! Pledge anew, restoring troth... Where is my voice? I wish to sing... casting fear to pit of fire. Even should be scorched my hand, consumed by promise of a star. Wonder-filled, in bath of star-- to leave this earth and yet, ascend! Love's fated fingers lace my hand, no ring to boast betrayal's troth... Warm my bones by stoke of fire. Play this harp, and hear me sing. A melody of time to sing, 'neath silver spot-light of this star, and glow in comfort, shadow's fire, no journey--but one step, ascend! Bound in ragged rope of troth, I work the knots to free my hand. No, not love, to grasp in hand. No, not song, to sweetly sing. Be still my mind of youthful troth, accursed night of darkened star. To will my chain--begone--ascend! Nature's nurture, coal of fire... I'll die then, for my lust of fire-- sacrificed by my own hand, by grace of angels, I'll ascend-- praising you, a joy to sing, resurrected by this star, that held my gaze, and begged my troth. And by this troth, of hunger's fire, I'll grasp this star, I'll stay my hand. Glory, be the song I sing, in symphony I do ascend. (repost from Open #?) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Wonder-filled, in bath of star-- to leave this earth and yet, ascend! Love's fated fingers lace my hand, no ring to boast betrayal's troth... Warm my bones by stoke of fire. Play this harp, and hear me sing. A melody of time to sing, 'neath silver spot-light of this star, and glow in comfort, shadow's fire, no journey--but one step, ascend! Bound in ragged rope of troth, I work the knots to free my hand. No, not love, to grasp in hand. No, not song, to sweetly sing. Be still my mind of youthful troth, accursed night of darkened star. To will my chain--begone--ascend! Nature's nurture, coal of fire... I'll die then, for my lust of fire-- sacrificed by my own hand, by grace of angels, I'll ascend-- praising you, a joy to sing, resurrected by this star, that held my gaze, and begged my troth. And by this troth, of hunger's fire, I'll grasp this star, I'll stay my hand. Glory, be the song I sing, in symphony I do ascend. ===================== Glory be to reposts cuz I missed this BEAUTY on the first time around (or me moth brain went senile) Sen this is stunning and enchanting and just flat out way cool ... awesome write of metaphor and imagery me twin. very impressive me girlie ...I wanna write like this when I grow up  me library of serene could not be comeplete with out this ... If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
when i first read your work, i was scared to talk to you because....well, you're too good!  fur me? i love a minstrel's song... i'm just a feline looking for a purr to carry 'long these lines you've written here, serene, a CATalist for fate. your harp-o, yes, plays music forth so PURRfeclty inate.  (thank you for letting me read) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
too good indeed!!! this is an excellent example of that. . . ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Beautifully written serenity..glad i caught it this time around..loved it ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I agree with ~V~ and I love the title too.. huggzz ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*sigh.........you are a wonderful writer. What do I have to say to get you to believe that and start submitting your work!!?? |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
A melody of time to sing, 'neath silver spot-light of this star, and glow in comfort, shadow's fire, no journey--but one step, ascend! Bound in ragged rope of troth, I work the knots to free my hand. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Wow! What a wonderful play with words you pen! This is surely one of your best. Deb |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--yer gorgeous...thank me lovely twin... Pandora...thanks much, been meaning to talk to you about a little thing called hope...smiles Sven...you are too good to ME...hugs sveetie! PdV...I'm chicken..that's why....cluck cluck cluck...love ya! and this is that same damned sestina attempt by the way...grr..where's my percocette? Victoria? thank you kindly...you are a sweet lady. wynter...you are a doll and have my gratitude... Deb? thank you as well... I'm very glad you enjoyed. and HUGS to Forum! love ya muchly... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--yer gorgeous...thank me lovely twin... Pandora...thanks much, been meaning to talk to you about a little thing called hope...smiles Sven...you are too good to ME...hugs sveetie! PdV...I'm chicken..that's why....cluck cluck cluck...love ya! and this is that same damned sestina attempt by the way...grr..where's my percocette? Victoria? thank you kindly...you are a sweet lady. wynter...you are a doll and have my gratitude... Deb? thank you as well... I'm very glad you enjoyed. and HUGS to Forum! love ya muchly... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--yer gorgeous...thank me lovely twin... Pandora...thanks much, been meaning to talk to you about a little thing called hope...smiles Sven...you are too good to ME...hugs sveetie! PdV...I'm chicken..that's why....cluck cluck cluck...love ya! and this is that same damned sestina attempt by the way...grr..where's my percocette? Victoria? thank you kindly...you are a sweet lady. wynter...you are a doll and have my gratitude... Deb? thank you as well... I'm very glad you enjoyed. and HUGS to Forum! love ya muchly... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--yer gorgeous...thank me lovely twin... Pandora...thanks much, been meaning to talk to you about a little thing called hope...smiles Sven...you are too good to ME...hugs sveetie! PdV...I'm chicken..that's why....cluck cluck cluck...love ya! and this is that same damned sestina attempt by the way...grr..where's my percocette? Victoria? thank you kindly...you are a sweet lady. wynter...you are a doll and have my gratitude... Deb? thank you as well... I'm very glad you enjoyed. and HUGS to Forum! love ya muchly... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--yer gorgeous...thank me lovely twin... Pandora...thanks much, been meaning to talk to you about a little thing called hope...smiles Sven...you are too good to ME...hugs sveetie! PdV...I'm chicken..that's why....cluck cluck cluck...love ya! and this is that same damned sestina attempt by the way...grr..where's my percocette? Victoria? thank you kindly...you are a sweet lady. wynter...you are a doll and have my gratitude... Deb? thank you as well... I'm very glad you enjoyed. and HUGS to Forum! love ya muchly... it would figure....on the sister's pc...she's a TRIPLE GEMINI.... [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 01-31-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ya know, I think I'll just say.....WOW! -SEA |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
good grief!! GREAT poem... damn, serenity! nothing like repeating yourself repeating yourself repeating yourself you sure you're not ME? and there's 3 of you using the SAME name? lol |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this oh so impressive write needs to "ascend" again...and be inhaled as well. YOU ARE POETRY KA!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Doing the birthday bump from me library of rhyme divine Sen keepers. Its your day..the forums shall be your marquee  |
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