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Sister Phoenix |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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*Thanks to Marsha for the inspiration* standing around the ashes they mourn her loss "she tried too hard" they say "she felt too much" "she just wasn't the same after. . . " after what? after the loss of a love she never had? after the loss of a life she never wanted? after the loss of a spirit she never knew? after what? they're not sure but they still mourn her loss I do not I knew that she had to burn that this trial by fire was something she had to endure and that when the trial was over there would only be ashes and now? now, I make my way through the mourners and, looking into the ashes, I shout one word. . . ARISE! and they all look at me like I'm a madman "fool!" they shout "she cannot arise, she is gone, can't you see?" I do not hear them, I shout the word again. . . ARISE! "no!" she screams and they turn in horror "I cannot, I will not, there is nothing for me to rise to" "leave me here, for here among the ashes is where I belong" they have a hold of me now, they're trying to drag me out but I will not go, I know you're there still among the ashes I pull free from them, and arms outstretched, I scream ARISE!!!! Arise Sister Phoenix, bird of death, to new birth Arise, and walk once again here on this earth Through the trial of fire your heart has come To walk proud again in the light of the sun Arise Sister Phoenix, bird of death, to new life Arise heart of strength forged by strife Sing your song with strong new voice once again With words you've not sung since way back when Arise Sister Phoenix, bird of death, to new love Arise spirit of life with the angels above Open your wings of life strong and proud Fly to your new life, away from the crowd and with my words, the ashes crackled the flames grew the smoke flowed and out of the ashes, she emerged the power of love and light flowing through her body they all wept, some out of joy for they knew they would follow and that there was hope for them some out of sorrow for they knew they would be lost and that there was no hope for them and you Sister Phoenix? you opened your wings proud and strong screaming your name to the heavens proclaiming your life to the stars and we watched and we wept and we smiled fly on Sister Phoenix, fly on and be strong live, love, be. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------ < !signature--> To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 01-09-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
WOW!!! Powerful story. Exhilarating!!!**** |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sven love, OH WOW, yours is truly truly wonderful. This sister of the phoenix is getting ready to arise too. Dear heart this is truly awesome, and if the little wretches I've got turning out superlatives would only work harder, I could give you loads, but since they are lazy I can't. How about my old and truly meant beautiful love, it really is too. Take care love and this goes into my libriary and on the wall. Watch out world the Phoenixes are coming back. Love Mushy Fly high Fly free Fly with Me!  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing Sven...James |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
As always, I knew this poem would be great because it came from you, Sven.....and as always, you surprised me with an extra touch.....the format reminds me of the profile of my symbol of strength, the Phoenix... Beautiful write, and beautiful artistry....  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sven, The best I've seen and read from you, a keeper. Sy |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful work!  People who inspire us are the greatest of gifts arent' they? Can I be your willful breeze, Come to touch, Your heart to ease? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Who could NOT think that this is a masterpiece...and Sven, one of your finest indeed...a Keeper surely, to be gilded in gold and laid among the finest of all pieces of art that have graced the Passions Pages... A Master, indeed! Thank you... |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This is such an inspirational piece in itself Sven, you were truly inspired...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
A very powerful piece Sven |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
My God Sven, this is amazing and powerful! You have quite the unique and thoughtful mind Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sven Marsha coined a phased and you took off the dross and turned it into molten gold. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
VAS, thank you. . . Marsha, thank you love for the idea. . . I thought about what would happen if the phoenix didn't want to come, or what if she just was unsure. . . that it takes a little more than the Phoenix own power. . . sometimes, they're human too. . . Thank you again love, and I'm glad that you like it. . . James, thank you my friend. . . Sunny, that you equate my name with great writing leaves me stunned. . . thank you my friend, and I'm glad that you enjoyed. . . Sy, thank you so much Sir. . . I am indeed humbled. . . Temptress, yes, people who inspire us are the greatest of gifts. . . Sunshine. . . if you keep that up, you're going to make me think that I'm good at this! thank you my friend. . .tracie, indeed I was my friend. . . thank you. . . hoot_owl, thank you my friend. . . Melissa, as do you my friend. . . thank you for reading. . . Kethry, Marsha's idea was already gold. . . I just reset the jewel. . . thank you. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
My goodness, that was so powerful, it gave me chills. I think I will turn myself into a phoenix as well. Awesome write, Sven Sandra |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
SVEN, you have penned a spectacular and intense poem here, one that filled me with such energy as I read thru it... I am also elated that I didn't get to miss this on first round... I'm sooooo impressed and the smile on my face right now mirrors the delight I received upon reading this tonite... Thank you coco |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Sven only you could call the Sister Phoenix up from the burning ashes. You have the ability to make one believe that anything is possible. |
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