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Candlelight Bay |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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Come stroll the sandy dunes of Candlelight Bay < !signature-->I plead do not let time take you away do not let my memory in your mind ever stray remember upon our lips the taste of Cabernet shared within our love of Candlelight Bay let us leave forever footprints upon the shore grains of sand in the wind forever we will soar only time will take you away my paramour forever in the night our bodies will sway upon the shores dancing in Candlelight Bay forever we will drift in the wind like bouquet our sweet memories will never melt like sorbet and if the hand of time invites me to dance away I will return as a mermaid in Candlelight Bay A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 01-11-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Victoria~  This is gorgeous!! I loved the ending........ -SEA |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
 Victoria~ Lovely, sensual piece...well penned Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Very nice. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you Sea tracie and Dragonpoe for reading...love the mermaid tracie...HUGS TO ALL... ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Victoria, this title drew me in...to a pure delight of read...thank you for weaving this one... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
like this much |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
a mermaid in Candlelight Bay better watch out for those fishermen. Beautiful images on that sandy shore. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I absolutely love the way you weave your words in this fantasy-like romantic piece! One of your best, I'm printing out a copy for myself The flow and the rhyme is perfect and I love how you repeat the line "of/in Candlelight Bay" throughout, that's very effective, especially when you begin and the end the poem with that important lineTake care, Melissa< !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 01-11-2001).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
sunshine..thanks you..i enjoyed writing this one very much..and im so glad you enjoyed too vandana..thank you for peeking inot2b..i would love to be a mermaid and tease all the fisherman haa...thank you  melissa..thank you melissa..for all your very kind compliments.. ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
oh, thank you for taking me away for a few moments, the sorbet was wonderful! "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you kathleen..ha..i am so glad you enjoyed ...HUGS ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Lady Ollyne Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 337East Coast |
To leave ones forever behind... to imprint upon anothers heart such wonderful lasting thoughts, Lady ~V~ ~smiling forever thoughts~ Lady Ollyne "O, learn to read what silent love hath writ: To hear with eyes belongs to love's fine wit"...Shakespeare |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
forever in the night our bodies will sway upon the shores dancing in Candlelight Bay forever we will drift in the wind like bouquet our sweet memories will never melt like sorbet and if the hand of time invites me to dance away I will return as a mermaid in Candlelight Bay ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Victoria, This is stunning. Love the visual blended with tender love. Deb |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you very much Lady and Deb.. i had fun writing this one..and im happy you both enjoyed it...HUGS ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
all these folks writing about water and beaches...and it's January...I still may have to go |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Victoria~ Though you are no longer here, or haven't been for some time ... I hope that someday you will return to see that your beautiful poetry is still being enjoyed~ I miss ya' lady~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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