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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
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 Snowflakes falling down whirling pieces from heaven wintersuit of earth draped in heavenly white dress peaceable sight of winter Charisma [This message has been edited by Charisma (edited 12-03-2000).] |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
This is very pretty, and I just love the graphic! Kind of makes the snow easier to love.  To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
yes yes yes yes yes! Wonderful! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* this gave me beautiful visions of snow. I love the romance of snow. *giggling* I am just not partial to the cold. Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Charisma, Wonderful vision you've captured here, Beautifully descriptive! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Charisma. . .you've really developed a knack for these. . . Wonderful!!! ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
And then we all go out and shovel the sidewalks, grumbling about how we're moving to Florida ASAP...lol! Nice tanka, Charisma! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
kcsgrandma: glad that you like it all, thank you for your kind reply Sunshine: I am glad that it is YES, that sounds so positive.... thank you for stopping by, love your replies always. Startime: I can hear you, and yes I love the romance of snow.......but not the cold too....brrrr.... ((hugs)) Dennis: thank you for your wonderful reply. sven: I am glad that you like it, and I am greatful for these wonderful compliment. I hope truly that I am doing it right. Elizabeth: were are you waiting for, Florida sounds good.....no shovels there, I hope. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Charisma---Beautiful tanka, I like it much. Nicely done. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 12-03-2000).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
lovely and a beautiful snowglobe too...thank you charisma..enjoyed ..HUGS ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
poeminister: I am so glad that you like this one too, thank you for your kind reply. Victoria: great to know that you enjoyed this one too, and I'm glad that you like the snowglobe too. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Charisma~ this is so pretty! I haven't quite got the Tanka thing down yet...... You did a wonderful job! -SEA |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
SEA: thank you for your reply and I am quite sure that you can write some wonderful tanka's too, knowing your style of writing and I am looking forwards to read them. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Charisma~ this is beautiful! really enjoyed reading this! also really liked the graphic you selected to go along with this. i don't know how to write a tanka very well, so i'll just continue to read yours take care. ~amy~ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Amy: thank you for your kind words, and I am glad that you like it. they told me that a tanka must have 5-7-5-7-7 syllables hope to see yours soon, looking forward to it. |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you for posting your inspiration, Charisma. I do enjoy Haiku, Senryu, and Tanka. The syllable count refers to classical JAPANESE poetry. English poets typicaly hold with the number of lines but at times ignore the syllable count. No matter how you choose to write...keep posting your gems for us. INclan |
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killer222 Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 48Northolt,Middlesex,England |
great ! "shun the frumious Bandersnatch"! Tuna is the work of the devil !! Killer222 |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
INclan: thank you for your explanation, its always good to know where the style come from and what the rules are... and I truly love to do these gems. killer: thank you for your read, glad that you liked it. |
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FlyHigh Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 84Bekkestua, Norway |
Very nice tanka, whatever that is, it gave me chills.. Both because it was well written and because I hate the snowy winters here in Norway. fH -- "Luck affects everything. Let your hook always be cast; in the stream where you least expect it there will be a fish." Ovid (BC 43-18 AD) |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
thank you flyhigh for your kind reply, well overhere its a while ago that it was really winter, only some wet snow falling down, but hey in my fantasy it must be marvelous to play around in thick white snow. And after running and playing drinking hot chocolate milk.....mmmm...remind me on good old days. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
nice tanka and i guess this is the next best thing cos i live in a place that will never get to experience snow....  enjoyed your offerings on haiku/senryu/tanka...waiting for more  |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Kaile: thank you for your kind reply, and I feel sorry that you never experienced the fun of snow. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Beautiful Charisma, both your poem and the graphic. Where do you people get these lovely graphics and how do you work them? |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
VAS: thank you for your wonderful reply, I wanted to mail you, but couldn't find an addy, the graphics you can find everywhere, and if you reply to a poem you can find some instruction on the bottom how to use images or html.... hope you will succeed in it, if not feel free to mail me and I will try to explaine how to do. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Now this is what I call a perfect tanka! You are very talented, I loved this, such unique descriptions. This is one of my favourites to date of any tanka I have ever read You should be very proud of this pieceTake care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This reminds me of one I had as a little girl, and how I loved it, thank you so much for the memory! What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Melissa: thank you for this wonderful compliment, and I noticed that you have read a lot of these forms, and I am glad that I am doing it well. still learning from the wonderful poets inhere. Irish: I am glad that I was able to remind you on that snowy day in your youth...thank you for stopping by. |
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