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Invisible Walls
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Invisible Walls |
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startin_fresh Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 137US |
I feel their presence Moving slowly inward I turn to look but see nothing Now approaching from all sides The movement of invisible walls Squeezing sensations intensify As I feel the approach.. The immense pressure applied Upon mind, body, and spirit. I brace against the impact Of the meeting of the walls The squeezing is unbearable Will it ever cease Beacon of Hope! Your guiding light during life's troubling moments. www.yourbeaconofhope.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I like the way you conveyed the feeling of pressure in this one...could feel the stifling atmosphere as I read. Nice work. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
startin_fresh, Ah yes, I have been there too. Tough place to be. If you can endure, you will energe a stronger and better person for it my friend. Powerful words.  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
I felt suffocated just reading this. Great write, Shawn. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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startin_fresh Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 137US |
It's interesting that this poem came about from my talk with a friend. She expressed the feeling of the "walls closing in" upon her. She asked I understood the feeling. The poem is my reply. Thanks Serenity,Lone Wolf and Tara statin_fresh Shawn Beacon of Hope! Your guiding light during life's troubling moments. www.yourbeaconofhope.com |
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