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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Discovery I dream my lips are soft like a rose of velvet slowly opening the fast forward of desert rain that wakes the sleeping tendrils and a symphony sweeps across fields of color I dream a song a love song that is like the whisper of the wind across the prairie that stirs and blurs the golden and weaves summer sounds of midnight on the deck of crossing some ocean and a storm is coming I dream I dream of the storm that draws energy from my core and throws it into my center where desire waits on white sheets to split time with a sigh Such dreams visit me that I know I’m drowning and the captain is missing for there is just a wild rolling taking me down into silent water into a green and golden and gray down down past breath past song into the silt of my own discovery. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I dream I dream of the storm that draws energy from my core and throws it into my center where desire waits on white sheets to split time with a sigh Such dreams visit me that I know I’m drowning and the captain is missing for there is just a wild rolling taking me down into silent water into a green and golden and gray down down past breath past song into the silt of my own discovery. ================== depth...yes....layers... yes.... complex...yes.... wow my dear...you went deep for this... and its wonderful to make your discoveries... this poem is so cool in its metaphors and imagery and dream illusions... and those lips....they are like roses  beautiful read sweet poet... call the captain home...tell him to meet ya in the rose garden  love to ya me Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie, the prairies get a rousing welcome from me...this had it all...you gave it all...he'll come back to claim it all... this is marvelous... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie- your words simply sing to me... 'I dream my lips are soft like a rose of velvet slowly opening the fast forward of desert rain that wakes the sleeping tendrils and a symphony sweeps across fields of color' absolutely beautiful, my friend..  hugs, ~vicky < !signature--> "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 12-03-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Ahhhhhhhh ! And there it is ... that touch that signature It's another discovery ! I think this is a new Crayola color moment !  Introducing Martie. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Martie just another deep and beautiful Martie poem that I have come to love so much. I don't know whether I've been clear into the silt of my discovery all the way or not... but I sure like this sweetheart....remember the song....I love the flower girl...flowers in her hair... flowers everywhere... well even though this poem is deep it still brings the reader up and fills the heart ....keep'em comin sweetheart I think you're working on your greatest fulfillment.....ethome |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--This one is so complex even I don't understand it..LOL...thanks hon for being so sweet! Karilea--Thanks or the marvelous! Hi Vicky--I love to sing...I'm glad you heard my voice! Marge--thanks for the Crayola...you're so cute! ethome--Thanks so much for such a sweet reply...I hope there will always be more to discover for you, and for me.. You are the one that is a sweetheart! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I believe I discover a new Martie with each post of yours I read. I believe you are the most inventive self-discovering poet here. And you'll never be buried in silt ~G~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW Martie you got deeper with each stanza especially loved these last lines..... down down past breath past song into the silt of my own discovery. sighhh "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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