Open Poetry #11 |
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Teardrop (Ghazal) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989![]() |
Last night I cried and you brushed away the first teardrop. Your anger grew and then you did not care about the next teardrop. We talked awhile and I thought that I saw your first teardrop. You ended our love right then and there with only one teardrop. Now I know that my love is gone as I cry my last teardrop. On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. ~me~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh how very sad. It always brings tears to my eyes to hear of love ending. My heart hurts for your loss. Much love from me to you Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I remember the day that I wrote this Startime, it was a painful day. I thank the powers that be that the day is past. Thanks for reading. On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. ~me~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Gentle Spirit, Such pain and sorrow in this one my friend. I am glad to hear that day is past. I hope you never have to feel this way again. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am glad that you've come through this grief, for the strength now shows that you can share it... well done! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent use of the form GS. . . it's not one that you see a lot. . . And the words, wonderful. . . ![]() ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lone Wolf, as I also am glad that day has passed. I hope no one ever has to feel this way!! Thanks. Sunshine, sometimes getting passed the pain ends up in written words. Thank you for reading mine. ![]() Ah Sven, it is good to see that you are familiar with the form. It is not the easiest challenge I have ever done, but the challenge came at a good time when I could make the words work in the form. Thanks....... ![]() On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. ~me~ |
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