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Romance Haiku Part II
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Romance Haiku Part II |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Garner thee an edge Here, within thy heart stay close Held my breath too long Light floats in so shy Soft as fingertips on skin Shyness welcomes love Heart fills full, songs trill As this is what thou hast willed Through thy mystery Presume not thy love Never, for thee hast laid claim Garnered thee thy edge Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ all are beautiful, but I like this one best....... "Light floats in so shy Soft as fingertips on skin Shyness welcomes love"  -SEA |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You're starting to write them like Willie Shakespeare now Sunshine...and thou art ever so much more cultured in thy themes of soaring romance...I beseech thee... write dearest maiden write thy heart on my page...write the now before mine tears flow in sadness amiss oh write the dearest lady with thy pen of golden sunshine. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Applaud.....you ARE the Queen of this form....wonderful done my friend, enjoyed them very much |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very tender and gentle...beautiful work. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* how beautifully you feed this romantics heart. *sigh* I would read you words of love and beauty all the day. Much love to you from me. Oh thank you so very much. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Presume not thy love Never, for thee hast laid claim Garnered thee thy edge ================================== presumption away thou art an infidel here hie thyself away BRAVO! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sunshine, the form is beautiful in your hands.... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is utterly utterly tres bon, vous tout la manifique, c'est la tout grand dame, bravismi. Wonderful Madam Kari, vous est la tres bon. You know I adore this one  you are the best at these. WowI'm getting enthusiastic again I'll try to curb my exuberence love. Take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA, thank you so much for picking out a favorite...[that one liked me, too!] Ethome, dear sweet Sir, thy request might be granted, some night long on dark, and short on slumber...thank you... No Charisma...I'm as SO trying to catch up with you...but I thank you for your kind words... Elizabeth, a beautiful from you makes me smile...thank you... Startime, that is an endearing comment, thank you... Interloper, hie yourself back and write some for me!...thank you {~,^} 'Deer...these old things? You think? Thanks! {~,^} Marsha, now you're going to make me brush up on my French!? OK! I always did have the accent down...with some practice! You may wax exuberant all you want, my friend...I don't think I can ever get tired of smiling...{~,^}...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
If you make me sigh anymore. . . I'm going to hyperventilate. . . beautiful. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
So lovely, you write this style perfectly. I could almost feel romantic..almost..but not quite. Thanks for your note.. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Quick someone, get a bag for Sven, I think I've made him ill...he's hyperventilating...oh my...{~,^} thank you Sven... Cat...I'll keep at it, just to see if I can hear a sweet word...and a sure song...just for you...and from you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Good day. You write senryus and haiku masterfully, these are excellent. Nicely done. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Poeminister, that is a most lovely comment...I have confused Haiku with Senryu but I believe I am getting them understood... so forgive me my blunders, but it is a lovely form, and I certainly appreciate your coming in to read. Thank you. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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