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Mommy and Daddy's Loud Talk
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Mommy and Daddy's Loud Talk |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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... Daddy listen...um...listen You and mommy should Well come with me Why little girl Cant you see I’m thinking Daddy come on, you and mommy Need to come and listen I need to tell you something What is it my girl I want to tell you something So you won’t be mad I’m not mad little girl When you were talking loud with mommy... Oh little girl come here I wasn’t mad at your mommy We were talking our problems out Daddy come and um give mommy a hug And then I’ll tell the both of you something Okay little girl... Okay... Husband of mine Yes wife? Come here But wife of mine our little girl has... Come here you I want to tell you You are a handsome man And I love you Let’s talk quieter After a kiss Wife of mine I’m smiling Thank you for the kiss I love you too now little girl Has something to tell us both But husband of mine she’s not around That’s funny where’d she go (...mommy...listen...um...listen I want you to tell daddy something I want you to tell him he’s cute That you love him and give him A great big kiss ok mommy? That’s what I want you to do) |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Out of the mouth of babies. How scared they get when the ones they love are out of sorts with each other. Children are beautiful!!!! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
sometimes it'd be nice to hear with their ears wouldn't it? Very nicely done. jwesley |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
sometimes it'd be nice to hear with their ears wouldn't it? Very nicely done. jwesley |
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aurora rain Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 90 |
i love the way in which this is written. exquisitely, and innocently. a sense of naivete there. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you friends of mine and now turn on ABC and watch the beatles special yuh!! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very nice!! I, like the little girl, was afraid of where this was going. I'm so happy for the happy ending and I hope it always happens that way for this family. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
so sweet walt..love it..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
wayoutwalt, I like this one Well done.And of course I watched the Beatles  ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yuh beatles rule that was so awesome and i am a beatle know it all yuh yuh thanx for the replies |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Awwww!! This is adorable. I love this, Walt. This may be your most beautiful yet! |
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Weave_Watcher Junior Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 21 |
Walt you are the bomb! I always look for ya always the first one I read. Been reading here for a while now just wanted to let ya know I liked it. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hiya WALT, this is such an adorable write... The format of this poem from the perspective of a lil one is so realistic I gotta tell ya this is sharp writing my friend... coco |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ This just touches tender ... such a wonderful innocence to it ... and what a lesson to be learned. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
truly sweet and shows your nature walt...she loves you, yuh, yuh, yuh...with a love like that, you know you should be glad! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yuh yuh yuh yuh yuh yuh yuh yuh and with a love like that yuuuuuuuh kno-ow it can't be bad yuh yuh yuh yuh! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
yuh....with such a love, no can't be bad indeed...hehehe...love this silly poem based on the thruth, children are heartbreakers. Charisma |
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