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Ghost fire |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Last night, a fire appeared, in the middle of nowhere, as the people in the town of Everclear, looked on complete silence and fear. The fire started in an old vacant shack, where junkies used to go and smoke crack. The fire intensified, as smoke blew to the sky. The color of the fire was orange-yellow, as it filled the night-sky, with an errie glow. Minutes later, the fireman arrived on sight, hopping to kiss this devilish fire goodnight. Their sincere efforts were lame, as the fire grew hotter by the minute as the fire seemed to stay the same, as it had some kind of hell within it. Everyone just stared in complete silence and shock, as if the fire had made-up its mind, when to stop. Suddenly, the fire frowned before it dissapeared as if it's existance, had never been there. The police arrived at the scene around 12:16 hopping to find evidence of some arsony. They saids that,"there was nothing to be found, no flammable things, or matchsticks on the ground". Everyone was in further silence and shock, in the turn of events of when the fire stopped as it was night that noone would forget because, it was a fire that noone had set. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Nate~ Fantastic write!!  -SEA |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Nate, Good impressions, well written. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful done Nate. loved reading this excellent piece. Charisma |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nate, my friend~ This is a marvelous piece. I'm in awe at these lines - 'as the fire grew hotter by the minute as the fire seemed to stay the same, as it had some kind of hell within it.' Thank you for sharing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, I can't believe the compliments I got for this piece because I really don't believe that my poem is as good that you say it is but however, a compliment is a compliment and I shall take it....thank you Sea, Marge, Charisma, and Daniel for your fantastic comments! Nathan |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Nathan it's a good thing that we are not asked to judge our own work...lol this IS fantastic!!! Wow, the imagery and the intensity and then the ending...what a weave! And any other weaves that you are thinking aren't that good...submit them...so we can be "wowed"!!!! The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Aha..very intereting Nate...James |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
enjoyed nate..i read what you said about not thinking it is that good...i feel the same sometimes..seems like the ones i dont like are the ones others like haa..strange isnt it..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Nathan..what an erie write here...and it is good...spooky but good... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Nate- wow...this is awesome!! such wonderful imagery...i could almost feel the heat as i read... 'as the fire grew hotter by the minute as the fire seemed to stay the same, as it had some kind of hell within it.' i have to agree with Marge...these lines are excellent... incredible write!! ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Nate! very good!! a fire with a mind of it's own.... I love how the title sets up the content....great write!!....ethome |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, you people just keep making me smile.....I still don't think it's that good but I am very pleased that y'll seem to like it so thanks to all my previous posters! Love ya, Nathan |
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