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Looking Back |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine shimmers across the lake Reflecting into prisms of light It appears to dance over the waves Until reaching the sandy shore There it warms my skin And soothes my weary soul Basking in this feeling I relive the dreams of yesterday The first vision is of you On the day in August when we met So many years and memories ago Even then I knew you were the one A love that innocently blossomed Out of a friendship we forged Grew to encompass our lives Mirroring heartfelt promises of tomorrow At just the sound of your voice My heart would leap to life To beat in rhythm with your own Wherever we were and wherever we went Looking back I thought you'd always be there My lighthouse guiding the way home Down the pathway to the future Where we promised to dwell forevermore Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Doesn't it seem that nothing turns out the way we think it will? Happens to me quite a bit. Liked this much. Elizabeth |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah..so sad. But as we remember, we should also look forward....put those memories in your heart and lock it. Then move to the future... |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
I enjoyed reading this. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ nothing is what it realy seems so we slip into our dreams the past is what the past will be step into the future to set you free. |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
this is incredibly beautiful. Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Bittersweet! This is so beautiful and somewhat sad LW. Even in the end...we'll always have our memories. Wonderful expression...... ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ What a lovely heart you have to hold these wonderful memories. Takes a special heart to do that, sweet lady. Enjoy your memories and hold them close. They are worth remembering. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
How things end up is always a mystery and the shock of the end result most times turns into treasured memories to soothe a wounded soul.... beautiful write....ethome |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Jen Very sad my friend, a lot of years together you do start to think that it is forever and will never end but hon I know the friendship is still their and I'm sure in many ways he is still your guiding light...I hope so anyway Love ya sweetie Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LW~ this is beautiful, and heart-achingly sad.....  -SEA |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Such sadness is written within your talented words. My heart hurts for you, dear one. I pray you will be embraced in love again. Thank you so much for the read. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
LW~ this is beautifully sad! one of my favorite pieces of yours...i've said it before and i'll say it again, you got talent in spades girlie! looking back isn't a bad thing, in fact sometimes it's good to reflect, just don't forget to look forward too. keep the memories, and learn from the past. i can't predict the future but my bet is you will find love again. and when you do, the pain you have gone through will stand for something. take care my friend. ~amy~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful writing from you. . . As always. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Great writing...Filled with heartache and yet spilling over with hope... http://communities.msn.com/PoetryGraphicsandMore |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"At just the sound of your voice my heart would leap to life." I have someone special like this...her voice affects me in this way...the sound and the style of her voice...James |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
heartfelt poem....love reading this wonderful piece. Charisma |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Poet de Vine stole the words right from my heart, LJ; I couldn't have said it any better. And I believe it too. Hang in there...remember it all, and move on, with it a part of your soul. jwesley |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Lone Wolf-Very sweet and sad. Don't let that lighthouse beacon lose its ray of hope for the future. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is beautiful poetry from your heart. Full of hope for new beginnings. I loved it, Jennifer. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Loved it!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Such tender weaving from your heart and memories my friend...these are the memories that warm our hearts on the coldest nights...now walk to the sushine my friend and hold it in your hand...it's waiting for you! Hugs to you!! The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I am a little overwhelmed by the responses this one received. I just want to thank you all for your kind replies and for reading my work. I appreciate it. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This one is so special, maybe others didn't have a chance to read it! I can fix that "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Kathleen, Thank you my friend. I am glad you enjoyed this. Sometimes, you just have to look back before looking ahead. Jennifer Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Oh gee does this hit home. I had many of the same feeligs. I does weeken with time. I do how ever write about thoes old feelings. love and light, Richard |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LW, I am glad this came back up...a beautiful read from you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
the past always holds the better days... a beautiful writing. i usually find it hard to get into poems that don't rhyme (mostly cuz they lack rhythm), but i thoroughly enjoyed this one. it's a reminder that hindsight can't be 20/20 if it's too clouded with tears... beatiful sentiments. "The bar is always open, the time is always right. If God's good word goes unspoken, then the music plays all night." |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I have to say thankyou to Irish Rose for giving me the chance to see this gem again. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
LW, I found this on page ten and I must say it's a beautiful N heartache write my friend... A tear in my eyes at 9:39am was not expected until I came upon your poem which touched me by the innocence of love that it speak's... Thank you for sharing this with us coco |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Richard . . . It is good to look back every now and then. I hope it does weaken with time. Thank you. Sunshine . . . Thank you for stopping by. Ethan . . . At times, yes it does. Glad you enjoyed it. Tears can get in the way sometimes, very true. EagleOne . . . Thank you for reading again. Coco . . . Here is a tissue my friend for the tear. It was a beautiful love in its time. Thanks. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Looking back can be hard, but as you stated it only helps one move forward....I enjoyed your words...Happy Holidays Lone Wolf...With Peace Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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