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Open Poetry #11

Draw in the smoke...

Master
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since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-11-26 04:48 PM

“...and gaze at the reflection in the mirror,
As streetlights gaze at drying puddles...”
J. Brodsky

Draw in the smoke and with the motion of a finger,
shake off the lazy fireflies, which often linger
to burn to ash. Cold bathroom lights reveal your flaws,--
the bald spot in your hair, the crooked nose...
Breathe out the smoke, and nothing’s to be seen,
except the rows of plastic bottles, -- blue and green
colognes and creams and other useless stuff,
which you still use in hopes of luring in true love.
The smoky mirror hides your grim reflection,
and now, none of your flaws remain...
Thus streetlights watch with warm affection
the puddles blurred by drops of rain.

Check out my poetry here:

http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2000-11-26 05:08 PM

I really enjoyed this one......very dream-like.......

-SEA

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

2 posted 2000-11-26 09:55 PM

Thank you SEA, I'm glad you liked it...

Beki
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since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

3 posted 2000-11-27 04:41 PM

"The smoky mirror hides your grim reflection,
and now, none of your flaws remain...
Thus streetlights watch with warm affection
the puddles blurred by drops of rain."

Loved these ending lines! This was a good read my friend, and hey, it was good to see your icture, too....now I knows whatcha looks like

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

4 posted 2000-11-27 08:48 PM

Thanks Beki, I'm actually a lot more handsome than that picture may suggest... lol

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2000-11-28 09:35 PM

I like this Master....

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

6 posted 2000-12-17 08:27 PM

Thanks Beki! Glad you liked it!

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