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Heart of Loneliness
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Heart of Loneliness |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Cryptic message sent from you to decipher it has been a task Many questions linger here left unanswered and unasked Inside this heart of loneliness I cry for the flame you tender Should I take the light you offer give in, give up, surrender? Fear locks this poetic voice words linger quietly unsaid Afraid to find they won’t be welcome my heart ruled by my head If you can find the key to me I welcome the opening of my heart But please, if this is just a game, just stop before you start. I can face this feeling for you with time to be sure it’s real How did you ever know, my friend That is the way I feel? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
'Cause friends understand the things we DON'T say. *S* I like this, PDV! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great description of a heart of lonliness with a great big gaurd up around it....but a gaurd that the person with the lonely heart wants to be rid of...very nice writing... I thoroughly enjoyed it.......ethome |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Poet deVine, Words of wisdom spoken here, this is wonderful. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I think that ethome hit it right on the head deVine. . . We want to get rid of that guard. . . to open up again. . . This shows it perfectly. . .  ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh*I truly hope tis not a game played with such a beautiful heart as I see within these words. Such sadness of loneliness mixed with such a hope that love is being offered. *sigh*beautifully written and very heartfelt. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very good, Sharon! I enjoyed this! Denise |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you for your kind replies...it's wonderful to know I got my message across in this. Hard to say what you feel in poetic verse when you could just come right out and say it!!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sharon...SCREAM IT FROM THE MOUNTAINTOPS...DIVE INTO THE OCEAN NAKED!!!! (I know I've said that before, but I think I just like typing it...lol) This is so demure and sweet, demure, but still full of longing! A lovely verse!!! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
quote: Wow, great work...I can relate. Elizabeth |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoy this much!!!!!!!!!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Sharon, can I just say...GO FOR IT!!! grab a piece of happiness offered. And if it doesn't work out, well you can cry on my shoulder as I have on yours. (but I bet it will )Sandra |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
A lonely heart with doubts and fears is one that has a scar or two. Time, that's the key. Good poem, full of heartfelt emotions. Liked it much. Deb |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Hi PdV, This was a wonderful read ... I really really liked it ... ~verve |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
this eerily echoes a situation in my own life..Makes me stop to see another view..thankyou!!!!!!! p.s. in my own situation I sent an unsure email saying we were better friends because I was unsure what he thought.. and thought that is what he wanted to hear..sucks when both argree when really they both want to be more stupid I know for me to do, but food for thought. artsygrl |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This just fits so well into my heart right now...thank you sweet lady |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
OOH OOH OOH...I really liked this.. Especially these two lines.. If you can find the key to me I welcome the opening of my heart Most surely a keeper.. ~LL~The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Poet DeVine...James |
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shira Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 88Hamburg, PA |
Very very nice... I really liked this. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I hope that they take the time to find the key as you said and that you find the only game you are playing is the one of love romping in the fields of spring. Lovely and tender write from a longing and sincere heart. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Inside this heart of loneliness I cry for the flame you tender' Great writing! Love this!! sp  'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
WOW! I, too, love this...very much jwesley |
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