Open Poetry #11 |
Sunrise Across Aqua Pool |
Martie
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Sunrise Across Aqua Pool Across the aqua pool the sun hid as the clouds slowly turned to pink, delicious blotches of candy cotton across the sky splashed ink. I still in my dream though stuck from warm flannel sheets became un-tucked, and barefoot opened door to be by crayon’s melt so awesome struck. Across the yard in perfect soft in color of morning sky I played, then as quickly as the blush had come I watched as time caused it to fade. < !signature--> In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-25-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I saw that sky yesterday morning, but would never have penned it this, this well...well... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful description of the sky and the wonderful panoramic beauty it can display.... good stuff! ethome |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ This is most depicting of sunrise-shared. Lovely visions from you, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Martie rhymed , rhymed, and its so fine, fine, a vision of a sky pink, pink, makes me want to wink, wink, Ya know Im smiling right now....right?? yeah...you know later-love it when your rhyme-gator me |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, your free verse is so wonderful! |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful picture of the sky you've painted Martie. You have a remarkable way with words. *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This is a wonderful picture that you paint Martie. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
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Sunshine--You would have penned it better! Ethome--Thanks for watching the sunrise with me. Marge--thanks sweet lady. Janet--only for you. Balladeer--I guess that means that my rhyme is ...hmmm, oh well Krista--thanks for the sweet reply. Sven--thanks so much for the compliment, I appreciate it. |
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Denise
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Beautiful picture, Martie!! Lovely!! Denise |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
even this - with its brevity - is penned with such beauty - I'm in awe - could picture it - and the transition perfectly ~S~ |
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