Open Poetry #11 |
The Lady of Unicorns Keep |
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
He had heard of the lady The Lady of Unicorns Keep He had heard of her beauty Of her wit and her charm All the tales men tell Over mugs of warm ale Sitting lonely and cold So far from their homes No maiden is she The Lady of the Keep But a woman Time tested and true He had heard how she waited Her eyes to the east Watching always watching But for what no one knew And so he came to the Keep To see for himself His armor aglitter Astride his dark horse From the shadows of the forest He waited and watched For a glimpse of the lady For whom they sang songs Day after day and on into the night He watched and he waited Til in the moons full glow She appeared on the wall Her eyes to the east The moon bathed her in glory A woman to be won By a warrior bold and true He mounted his stallion And rode out of the shadows A Black Knight a memory Come to claim Unicorns Keep And she saw him This dark knight Advancing upon her A vision a dream a lover perhaps His horse pranced as he beckoned Come down from your wall Open the Keep Allow me inside Her hands on the gate Her heart on the line Tha Lady in the Keep The Warrior outside |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
GASP* WHAT HAPPENS NEXT oh sorry yuh i likes it!! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Yeah so tell us...what happens next. Had to come in when I saw the promise of seeing a unicorn but now I want to know what the story has to unfold or is that going to be left up to our own minds wanderings? Nice write, enjoyed much can't you tell? |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Sometimes thing left to the imagination tend to intrigue. nice write Paula, Rich |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Ah yes a mysterious and surreal maiden...James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula, I love this, like Mark the unicorn called me in, and then I was caught. Really great writing love, absolutely wonderful. So tell me love is there more? Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Paula, a serial to start my day, Great! Now I'm hungry for more. write on Kethry. Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I just loved this poem... I agree with Spiked on the intrigue aspect... Great write Paula and thank you for an enjoyable read Coco |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like this, the theme (one of my favorites) writes well with you. As does everything. Sandra |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Paula, Wonderful poem, a classic so beautifully done. "From the shadows of the forest He waited and watched For a glimpse of the lady" Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Actually I was hoping the KNIGHT might write the next part... Walt...we will just have to wait and see what happens now wont we...hehehe Mark...the lure of the unicorn is powerful...what will she do? You will have to wait and see. Rich...intrigue, suspense...will she wont she? Is he her knight? Thank you James...she is all that and more...thank you dear friend Marsha...I'm not sure if there is...like I said was hoping for a KNIGHT...we shall see...thank you sweetie Kethry...we can but dream of what her decision might be...thanks Coco...so shall we go on? or just let you decide what she does? Thanks Sandra...what a sweet compliment...I thank you Daniel...I enjoyed writing this...so different for me...Im glad you like it |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Paula? I truly loved this one...full of rich symbolism and intrigue....and I too liked the open ending...but then, I would...grin....thank you for this one! I like very much!!! (awesome title too) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love the setting of this one Paula a real Camelot type of tale...well written...but yeah...what happens next....your buddy ..ethome.....good writing!! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
mysterious and intrigue piece..truly love and enjoyed it....excellent as always Charisma |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Serenity...you are quite welcome...its been fun...now I just have to decide if I should do another LOL ethome...you too? Well maybe you could HELP hehehe... Charisma...thank you it was fun to write |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
You really must write more!!!! This is just fabulous, I love it! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
EagleOne...lol oh lol...I must huh? Well maybe just for you ok? |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Paula... This took me back ......... What a wonderful dreamy piece you've penned. I so much enjoyed reading this. ~*note to self...remember to add to library*~ ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Irie...Im so glad you liked it...I enjoyed writing it |
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