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The drummer
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The drummer |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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He bears the drum drumming, drumming strumming hearts he’s beating the drum drum drum and they sway his way when he allays their fears aside helps them hide helps them bide turns the tides then away he rides to the beat of the drum the drumming the strumming he strums their hearts they will not depart he did not think he would start this stampede wild eyed greed to read the strum of the drum it is slow, the beat fans glow the heat in the repeat repeat of the drum song of dance beat of chance fevered romance took a stance did he with the drumming strumming everyone stills, listens thrills to the beat of his drum doesn’t leave the heart doesn’t quit the blood becomes the breath one more conquest can’t let it rest the drum the beat beat beat lives on in twilight taken to new height dreaming delight with the beat beat beat hear the drum he’s come to come and gathers in the heart’s beat Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
You know I'm going to have that drummer in my head all day now........  liked this one a lot.  -SEA |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, beat that drum, Oh! WOW, yes love this one too. It was the drums that did it, they stirred me,  Really great write as you KNEW I'd say. Well done.Take care Majestic M  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I can hear him drummin and feel him strummin.. keeps going and going... the energizer bunny of love. Wonderful poem. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Sunshine, Great poem, well done. A copy to Ringo would make him proud. "song of dance beat of chance fevered romance took a stance" Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA...quick, throw a lifeline...he's got us all... and Marsha...which continent did the drums originate from...quick, tell me... Poeminister, yes, of course, exactly... Daniel JD...Ringo...OMG, did not think of that...but I would hope...OMG...do you think for a moment, he would blink and see...YES... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine, Nice beat here. I just love drums . . . they sound so neat and mysterious sometimes. Well written. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sunshine- MAKE IT STOP...LOL. Now i have Sonny and Cher going through my head... 'and the beat goes on...and the beat goes on...' you'll pay for this..lol. seriously though...i really like this one alot... very..ummmm...rhythmic.. enjoyed.. hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
beating in the heart of everyone my friend. . . excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lone Wolf...how easy to rename you Love Wolf, I almost slipped...for your answers/responses are always full of care...I too love a good drum beat...that pounding of the heart...when it quickens to the rhythm...wow...thank you... Vicky...so, so, [beat, beat] yes... Sven...yes...sir,...you, and others here...beat in the heart of everyone...you guys just won't let us gals get a good night of sleep, y'know.... and the beat goes on... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"it is slow, the beat fans glow the heat in the repeat repeat of the drum" Hi Sunshine. You show a very effective employment of repetition in this piece. Very nicely written! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Okay so I love a good beat too. Wonderfully penned and I have to admit that the thoughts in this one bring special enjoyment to me but I ain't a tellin why. Well, maybe I will. I see the line of beautiful verses lined up in a row waiting to be read and each and every one of them marching to their own individuality and the masses lining up as if in a trance to read them and get their daily dose of rhythmed medicine so to say. Loved the repition in it and the flow. Almost like a special poet's cadence for the season. (BTW..."Little Drummer Boy" is one of my holiday favorites.) |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, Africa, where else! I seem to remember reading somewhere that was the begining point for everything. This really is a great poem love, I love it. It was the only musical instrument they'd let me play at school, even took my recorder away because they said it was a crime against music. Take care MM Got to get back to work or I'll be hung out to dry. Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Claire, thank you for helping to beat the drum... Mark, "Little Drummer Boy"...now I had not thought of that when I wrote this, but who does NOT like that particular song during the Christmas season...so glad to see it is a favorite of yours as well... Marsha, Plains Indians were more on my mind than Africa, but that works for me as well...some musical pieces just need that particular pounding, don't you believe?...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I like the beat of this drum, Karilea! Very good! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--I know just what you mean..there is something about a drum that touches the core and plays it like a heart..thank you for writing it so well. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
denise, thank you... Martie...maybe with the moon beginning to fill out again, it's a good time for the beat to come back to the forefront...and straight to the heart... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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