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I Didn't Hear Me
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I Didn't Hear Me |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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I Didn't Hear Me clear thoughts are needed so I can close my eyes and breathe but darkness takes it all... and yet again I see myself in the liquid as it reaches a drowning of my soul begins and terror pushes through I scream no one hears I cry no one sees my imagination? I laugh the laugh of a mad woman and yet... you heard that so why didn't you catch my soul as hurled through the zone you know... that zone with the speed control of no control where demon talons grip a tighter hold than reality my friend~~ (Yes, I called myself that once) it's the vines.. the vines as they slowly reach from deep within the ground hundreds of years they've been growing and... Yes they've tortured others but this time this time it's me make the clock stop ticking will you turn the lights off dont look at me now you didnt look before when I screamed you didn't come when I called and... I tried oh God, I've tried so many times to walk away and leave the vines where they stood and... yet no matter where I am even in sleep they torment me awake, I can feel the blood drip from my legs as once again they climb~~ my stomach churns my eyes burn...and yet I know soon I should sleep soon... I will the madness some say to accept, makes its bed and... I sleep with a demon of a different kind tonight as my fate crashes to the floor scattered among the many emerald shards of another crystal wine glass |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I heard you. I at times expect to be heard, just wish someone knew what I want to say but can't make a sound. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
wow..you just made me speed my way through this poem...simply written but i liked the way how it is packed full of imagery and hence how its impact is tremendous....  |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
thank you both for taking the time to read and comment, I truly appreciate it. Snow |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
There's a lot of powerful emotions here!!! Excellent write; makes you think so you have to read it again Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Snow- WOW!!! i know i use that word to describe your poetry alot...but it works! this just screams and aches all the way through...and you have me feeling it with you. 'my friend~~ (Yes, I called myself that once) it's the vines.. the vines as they slowly reach from deep within the ground hundreds of years they've been growing and... Yes they've tortured others but this time this time it's me' 'as my fate crashes to the floor scattered among the many emerald shards of another crystal wine glass' simply incredible, my friend!! i am loving your writing!!! hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Neve, I've always been captive to the way your words work through me...this is no exception. Robert Joseph ~enb~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Such powerful work...the emotion surged through this piece like a churning river...excellent writing~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Wow! This was excellent. Images were very powerful, and I think I have felt this way before. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
snow..i love this..i wish i could pick out every line that spoke to me..but i'd have to copy down the most of it! hugs, dg "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
pepper, I always love when someone writes something that makes me think, so I thank youfor that comment! vicky, I like that you use"WOW" lol thank you so very much!! Robert, thank you so much. enb...very much so! Butterflies...thank you for that comment, I truly appreciate it. Tremptress, *smiling* thank you!! dg, thank you for what you said. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece so much! Snow |
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