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SpitFire
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0 posted 2001-01-08 11:28 PM


Untitled

I could try writing in here for an hour.
Of love,...or of writing you away.

There is too much noise.

It is inside of me.  In ways that shudder limbs and cripple sight.

Noise so alive, that walls absorb the aftermath, the wreckage spilling
from spinning spins, from rattled cages, limp.

I could try. I suppose.

Writing of the distance between knowing.
Or of the weather in the eyes of surrounding souls.

I slip through all the understanding. I surf why.

I ask for nothing in return and we breathe.

We could. I suppose.
Focus strangeness. Redirect the when.

We could string time on thirty nine cent twine and run.
Or I could sit here,...and write about why.






[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 01-09-2001).]

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insect
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1 posted 2001-01-08 11:55 PM


Fantastic Fire!
Nice to breathe you always
How about "We Breathe" for a title

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-01-09 12:04 PM


It is inside of me.  In ways that shudder limbs and cripple sight.

=====================
Writing of the distance between knowing.
Or of the weather in the eyes of surrounding souls.
========================

I ask for nothing in return and we breathe.

We could. I suppose.
Focus strangeness. Redirect the when.

We could string time on thirty nine cent twine and run.
Or I could sit here and write about why.
======================
your poetry is so unique I dont even think there is a "category" for it
(not that it needs one)
but WAY COOL is where Im gonna put it in my file
very cool view SF ...
awesome write
jm



No one ever told me ... I could get lost while standing still ...
and sorrow doesnt make a sound ... as it takes away all your will.


catalinamoon
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3 posted 2001-01-09 07:03 AM


SF, this is great! I know right where you are coming from here. Good job of describing this feeling..
Peace.
Sandra

dgvarner
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4 posted 2001-01-09 07:13 AM


well spitfire..you do have a way...    i love this...wonderful poet you are..i'm left a tad speechless..so i'll quit rambling already! ...but i love this..lots!  

hugs, g


"oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens

tracie66
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5 posted 2001-01-09 07:18 AM


Hey you  
Fantastic write, way to go spits....I love your unique way of writing, makes for a fabulous read
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2001-01-09 07:38 AM


SpitFire~
You allow us to Surf The Big Why ~

'We could string time on thirty nine cent twine and run.
Or I could sit here,...and write about why.'


Either would be fine with me.
But, I'm glad you took the WhyWay !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

SpitFire
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7 posted 2001-01-09 11:16 AM


~Insect, so good to have you stop by. Thanks for breathing me.
~Janet Marie, you make me feel,...special (?). Sweetness. Thank you.
~Sandra, Hi you. Thank you for reading me! We smile?
~DG, hey thanks for coming by and all that you said. Truly. Oh and I dig your signature.
~Tracie, you're so sweet. Thank you for reading.
~Marge, always a pleasure to have you stop by and leave your thoughts. Thank you.
*All of you.
*Peace.

jwesley
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8 posted 2001-01-10 11:59 AM


Ah, the empty thoughts of active minds not knowing what to do, or say, or how to go about it, yet knowing it for what it is;the limbo we stand in, lost but found, pathless yet full of beckoning doors; silent, soulful, wanting, needing rebirth of self.

Great write Spitfire...as usual.

Don't see enough from you anymore. Miss you.

jwesley

jwesley
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9 posted 2001-01-10 12:01 PM


Ah, the empty thoughts of active minds not knowing what to do, or say, or how to go about it, yet knowing it for what it is;the limbo we stand in, lost but found, pathless yet full of beckoning doors; silent, soulful, wanting, needing rebirth of self.

Great write Spitfire...as usual.

Don't see enough from you anymore. Miss you.

jwesley

Dark Angel
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10 posted 2001-10-14 06:34 AM


hmmm how did I miss this excellent write from you dear?

Just love the way your words blanket these pages.

Maree  

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