Open Poetry #11 |
I Am |
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
**taken from template posted in challenge forum Ok Sen and Mark ... now ya wont have to poke me in the eye with your pen I am contentment ... unrequited ... unrealized ... uninvited. I wonder if I'll find my way back to me ... and will I like the me I then see. I hear the silent tears of night ... the sounds of sorrow taking flight. I see the secrets that you keep ... all that your soul has hidden deep. I want you to see you thru my eyes ... accept the visions of butterflies. I am contentment ... unrequited ... unrealized ... uninvited. I pretend I don't feel the pain ... don't hear the demons calling my name. I feel like I cant pay the cost ... cant find my way back from becoming so lost. I touch the heat of the pretty blue flame ... ever drawn ... this moth's shame. I worry about things I cant change ... wishing I could rewrite the past's sad page. I cry for innocence taken too soon ... the child born on the darkside of the moon. I am contentment ... unrequited ... unrealized ... uninvited. I understand some things are meant to be ... decided by fate and destiny. I say "I love you" without regret ... live and learn ... forgive and forget. I dream of a world filled with humanity ... free of hate's greed and insanity. I try to raise my children strong ... give them a place where they belong. I hope they will always find their way ... for all these things ... I do pray. I am contentment ... unrequited ... unrealized ... uninvited. Janet Marie ********* ~Let It Rain~ Amanda Marshall from the self titled CD I have given, I have given And got none Still I'm driven by something I can't explain It's not a cross, it is a choice I cannot help but hear his voice I only wish that I could listen without shame Let it rain Let it rain on me Let it rain, oh let it rain Let it rain on me I have been a witness to the perfect crime I wipe the grin off of my face to hide the blame It isn't worth the tears you cry to have a perfect alibi Now I'm beaten at the hands of my own game It isn't easy to be kind With all these demons in my mind I only hope one day I'll be free I do my best not to complain My face is dirty from the strain I only hope one day I'll come clean Come take my hand We can walk to the light And without fear We can see through the darkest night Let it rain Let it rain on me Let it rain, oh let it rain Let it rain on me *********** ~3 AM~ by Matchbox Twenty from the cd: You or Someone Like You She says it's cold outside, and she hands me my raincoat She's always worried about things like that. She says it's all gonna end, and it might as well be my fault And she only sleeps when it's raining, And she screams, and her voice is straining ... She says baby ... It's 3AM I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. She's got a little bit of something, God it's better than nothing And in her color portrait world she believes that she's got it all She swears the moon don't hang as quite as high as it used to. And she only sleeps when it's raining, And she screams, and her voice is straining, She says baby, It's 3AM I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. No one ever told me ... I could get lost while standing still ... and sorrow doesnt make a sound ... as it takes away all your will. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I wonder if I'll find my way back to me and will I like the me I then see. I want you to see you thru my eyes accept the visions of butterflies. I feel like I cant pay the cost cant find my way back from becoming so lost. I worry about things I cant change wishing I could rewrite the past's sad page. I try to raise my children strong give them a place where they belong. I hope they will always find their way for all these things I do pray. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ JM, my dear PoetFriend, ya got me in tears as I read intently rite to the end... A touching and beautiful write dear lady, and it's one I shall treasure... Hugs2u coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 01-08-2001).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well it is about time you posted this one my friend. You are all this and more as I find out daily in our chats. You are one of a kind and you are definitely "GROOVY". I love the way you took the challenge and turned it out in your own signature style, but of course you knew that. I am not going to pick a favorite part as it is ALL you. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I am contentment ... unrequited ... unrealized ... uninvited.-----but not unamazing--- very nice JM Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
BTW my friend..............It ISN'T 3 AM yet!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! What ya doin postin early? I know.....I know.....first sen and I threaten ya with our pens to post it then we complain about the darn time a day ya do it.LOL Can't please a cowboy ya know.......well.....not easily anyway. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Janet--Wonderfully expressed and written...enjoyed the read... Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Beautifully done, J.M. You have some lovely ideas and ideals! You've woven yourself into this piece wonderfully. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ This is a remarkable rise to the challenge. To know yourself - is to know ... 'I say "I love you" without regret ... live and learn ... forgive and forget.' Absolutely, my friend ~ absolutely ! Love n' hugs ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Dear Janny This is just exquisite, great expression of yourself and devine imagery....fabulous job sweetie ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey baby moth girlie gator...(huh?) lol... I NEEDED TO READ THIS ONE....again and again. This is written with some wise ink....I love this poem...and I think I should tape it over my damned icq....smile for me now... Thanks you JM...hugs for posting this--I know you didn't wanna...hope you feel better lovie...HUGS! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
JM* It's times like these baby that I'm merely a reflection...you've taken my breath away sweetie... Love you~ Swim in the waves of the weave...Not the mind of the weaver~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You not only met the challenge JanetMarie ... but you exceeded it as always with your wonderfully descriptive style! What a wise and splended look into the heart of you ... I always love what I see there ... excellent JM, take care! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
I understand some things are meant to be ... decided by fate and destiny. I say "I love you" without regret ... live and learn ... forgive and forget. I dream of a world filled with humanity ... free of hate's greed and insanity. I try to raise my children strong ... give them a place where they belong. I hope they will always find their way ... for all these things ... I do pray. I am contentment ... unrequited ... unrealized ... uninvited. Janet Marie, I can learn from you! You handle content and style with equal ease. Stan |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Janet my sister you are wiser than me... remember this. The same applies to this write. I loved the first example posted but this... this is stupendous. Iloveitwhenyouwritelikethis Write on moth woman Kethry. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Oh, I've heard these songs, they are wonderful! I am a big fan of Matchbox Twdnty myself, thank you for sharing these lyrics, my friend! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
I cry for innocence taken too soon ... the child born on the darkside of the moon. I am contentment ... unrequited ... unrealized ... uninvited. You are pure.....you are joy.....you are love. One thing I have learned from posting here, dear one, and that is that you stand for LOVE unconditionally given. Much love and hugs to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://www.voy.com/7622/ http://www.powerpoems.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jm, The devil and the angel have made a pact And from your poem it is a fact. The walls you built are ten feet tall And they echo with wisdon in each call. God bless you Janet Marie. Winkiewinkie. |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
Beutifully written Janet,keep up the good work and set Mark straight. your poetic friend, Cathy Cathy Marie Bohannan |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, what about brown eye's and a tease, very very sweet tease. Very very nice write. Parker |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Coco ... thank you sweets...your replies always touch me too. Mark ... well you know me always late to the dance ... and as for my signature style...as moody as my muse is these days Im not sure I have a style..but I love ya for seeing the me and thinking its Groovy. Thank you my groovy cowboy co-hort Jamie... I thank you for such an "amazing reply"... its always great to see your name here poet sir. Mark...are you back!!! LOL...yeah yeah...I KNOW it wasnt 3 am...but I know YOU will find this hard to believe but SOME of us ACTUALLY SLEEP at night ...and trust me I know exactly what pleases a cowboy thanks for encouraging me ... which is a nice way of saying not poking me with that pen ..you and Sen ...LOL Poeminister .. thank you sir...Im glad you stopped by and enjoyed. VAS ... thank you so much for the wonderful reply, I hope I can live up the my ideals. Margie ...thank you sweets ...and Im trying to know .. and understand...being a Gemini.. I wake up somebody different some days hugs back to ya. Tracie ... thank you hon ... for such a sweet reply....glad you saw me in there some where Me Twin-gator ... thank you for putting up with me moody muse ... tape this where ever you like me sweet .. on me forehead for starters LOL ... and this wicked flu bug is still hanging round.. me thinks me needs ya to put a hex on it. NOT even me raspberry tea can whip it ... scary huh? LOL..maybe me needs something cajun(hehe) hugs baby Holly-girl ... thank you me SS..your more than a reflection on any day .. and if you start coughing dont blame me LOL love ya too and ya have been missed here. Kit... you always see a better me than me and I thank ya for that sweet poet.. and for this wonderful reply. Stan .. I thank ya much for the compliment poet sir and again...Welcome. Keth ... thanks for reading them both... thought it be good to try again and see what I could find hiding in the flame TY for such a great reply MA, thanks for reading...and Im glad you enjoyed the songs...MB20 are one of my most favs too. Startime... thank you for such a very sweet reply...I am touched by your kind praise... I am learning as I go that there is more to it than unconditional ... also learning to love unselfishly...Im working on that one... thank you again for such a wonderful reply. Sweet Sy ... thank you always for the poetic reply and I dont knoiw if they made a pact or have just learned they have to put up with each other...maybe its the raspberry tea ... or the wise and winkie stinky company I keep ... Bless you too my dear poet. Cathy ... so great to see your name here and I thank you ... as for Mark... I'm trying.. its full time job but I am trying LOL thank you all for the kind replies love to poetry land jm No one ever told me ... I could get lost while standing still ... and sorrow doesnt make a sound ... as it takes away all your will. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When I care to know the very best I think of you |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
I liked very much JM Thanks Rich |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Very real. You show your self in all the ways you are, and feel Fate and destiny are the roads we walk in life... so true. Great write. Deb |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
this is so you big sis and so much more,and you know i love this style of poetry from you, and you better not give me your flu bug while im here putting you in my library. luv yas lil sis my sister is the poet I am but a shadow. by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You are quite a woman...James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Janet Marie as always, you have surpassed the challenge, this is truly incandescent. I really think you have captured your uniqueness, your individuality, your soul. Utterly wonderful. Take care Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
JM~ < !signature-->I have enjoyed this "meeting" of you....beautifully done....I was at a loss of words...so forgive my brief statement of your poem..... Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 01-08-2001).] |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Janet, you've indeed met and conquered the challenge....in excellent form I must add! Beautiful work and thanks for sharing! Hug and smiles! Nathan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--What a wonderful write, my friend...as all have said before me...wise and wonderful you are, and more! |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
JanetMarie, Very well done, I enjoyed this thoroughly. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Challenge well met and then some - remarkably well written, I feel your words and stand in awe Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
I wonder if I'll find my way back to me ... and will I like the me I then see. I hear the silent tears of night ... the sounds of sorrow taking flight. I see the secrets that you keep ... all that your soul has hidden deep. I want you to see you thru my eyes ... accept the visions of butterflies. ... I understand some things are meant to be ... decided by fate and destiny. I say "I love you" without regret ... live and learn ... forgive and forget. WOW!...and some more WOW! i love this sooo much..you are wise, poet friend.. i couldnt even follow the template (give me too many rules and i may as well not write... ) but you did it all such justice!! wonderful..absolutely fabulous write jm!! so many lines of pure absolute wonderfulness!! LOL i MUST put this in my library.... love those songs also..i'll have to look up that first one..havent heard it b4.. hugs! g "there is no 'best' in a world of individuals" -unknown |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Janet, I love this poem! I enjoy your work very much. Keep it up! ~Laura~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
P-man... (you slipped in on me earlier when I was repling) well I couldnt tell all my secrets now could I thank you for the sweet treat of a reply....I have missed seeing your name and teases around here. Sun ... I am so far from the best of anything...but I truly do thank you for saying so and for being a daily ray. Rich ... thank you poet sir for the read and kind reply Deb ... thank you much for seeing me in this and for the encouragement. Trisha...thanks me sis for stoping by today to check on me and I hope ya dont get this bugger of a germ, but who better than me to give ya one ' SBJ ... thank you for thinking so and for the sweet reply, I hope to live up to it. Marsha .... your replies are alway so generous , thank you for the wonderful compliments..incandescent isnt something I get called often LOL TY GE ... the few words you said were more than enough and I thank you for such a sweet reply. Nate ... thank you poet sir... Im so glad you likes this... it was fun to write and do it differently than the one from the last challenge. Martie ... thank you always sweet poetess pal for seeing wise in my words Daniel .. thank you poet sir...so glad you enjoyed and nice to see your name here. Melissa ... how great to see you here .. and thank you for such a "remarkable" reply. DG ... I thank you much for such a wonderful enthusiastic reply and kind compliments, Im honored to be added to your library and I know what you mean about rules...exactly why I have yet to write a sonnet ... all those rules and structure scare me muse off .. but this one wasnt too bad to follow.. thanks again for stopping by, nice to have you here. Laura ... Hi there girlie...thank you and it great to see you here as well. thank you all for the wonderful replies...I am overwhelmed by the response to this to be honest. thank you again to Sen and Mark..I almost didnt post this. hope to get caught up on my replies as I get over this flu bug I been dancing with since New Years day... sorry I missed so many of the challenge poems posted earlier this week. love to all in poetry land jm No one ever told me ... I could get lost while standing still ... and sorrow doesnt make a sound ... as it takes away all your will. |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Janet Marie, I sure wish I could put from mind to pen and paper the way you do. This is a very beautiful use of words. Love and hugs, Mother E |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Mother Earth ... you do just fine expressing your heart and poets soul...thank you for the lovely reply. take care jm |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Aw Ms. Janet..So glad I can't sleep tonite..this one I could've missed and I surely wouldn't have wanted to do that... This is so "YOU", Unconditional in all you do and say...I don't know what else to add that hasn't already been said..You know anyway how special you are to so many..Me thinks you are an angel sent from above..Bunches of hugs to you... ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This is one of the best I've read yet! I love it! Of course...I could just be biased now since I've found out that you adore Matchbox Twenty as much as I do....hmmmm..... NOPE!! Its your wonderful poetry that, shamefully, I don't read as much of as I should. Laters! Can I be your willful breeze, Come to touch, Your heart to ease? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
LL ... hey you...its so good to see your name here again me girlie...thank you for such a sweet reply. Hope to see some poetry from ya soon. Temptress ... and thank you too for such a kind reply... yeah .. ya just cant go wrong with a tune from Robbie and the boys. Nice to meet another fan thanks all for the wonderful replies to this. take care jm No one ever told me ... I could get lost while standing still ... and sorrow doesnt make a sound ... as it takes away all your will. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
And I am simply in awe Way to go girl!!!! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ always, you are amazing -SEA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If I'd never had the pleasure Of reading/meeting you before I'd think you were remarkable - As it is, I'm awestruck more. This is superb, JM! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jan~ i feel shame that i am only now replying to this. me very sawwwy. this as ALL of your work is so YOU! beautiful, amazing, inspirational, talented, i could go on..what the heck fun loving, caring, compassionate...it is full of the strength, love, and loyalty that i have come to know from you. i know you always say i give you compliments too high but me thinks you underestimate yourself and it is high time you got the praise you deserve and this little gem does you justice!! take care. love ya. amy ~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hoot Sea Southern and Amy you ALL give me way too much credit but ya make me smile and feel like i can fly and I love ya for it.... thank you all for such sweet and generous replies.. Southern thank you for the sweet poetic reply as well... and can ya beleive it....open 12 already...WOW later me gator girlies ... jm |
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