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Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2001-01-07 01:38 PM

"wish you were here"
is what her note said
and in those four words
I knew her heart
a heart that was alone and lost
seeking a love that she could hold

I didn't know what to say
I wanted to tell her so much
to tell her how I felt
tell her how she's made me feel
give to her what she's given me

but, all I could say was
"wish you were here too. . ."

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

1 posted 2001-01-07 01:43 PM

Sometimes that's all that needs to be said ... you're right
Especially if the magic is there
Nicely done Sven

inot2B
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since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

2 posted 2001-01-07 01:48 PM

You seem to be alone and sad.
Wish you could tell her that she is the one and for her to come nearer to you.

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2001-01-07 01:55 PM

love those little "love" notes....perfect write here....

Greeneyes~

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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

4 posted 2001-01-07 01:59 PM

Sven,
If I say wish you were here
would you then fly so near
help to stop my disappear
My, I wish...you were here.

Write on
Keth

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

5 posted 2001-01-07 01:59 PM

I liked this ......somethings are better left unsaid

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2001-01-07 02:03 PM

Sven I think that says it all..James

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

7 posted 2001-01-07 02:31 PM

This is sad
I liked the simplicity in this very much.

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart

Kathleen

Temptress

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since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

8 posted 2001-01-07 03:39 PM

A wonderful response to a softly smiling statement.

Simply beautiful, Sven. I am sure you have given much of your own.

Can I be your willful breeze,
Come to touch,
Your heart to ease?

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

9 posted 2001-01-07 05:45 PM

What more could you say, my friend. That is plenty..
Sandra

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2001-01-07 05:49 PM

And what if it had said "wish I were there..."...?

Isis
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since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

11 posted 2001-01-07 06:38 PM

Sometimes the simpliest responses speak volumes, she's lucky that you'd want to be with her hon. Beautiful as always... I don't think you have it in you to write a truly venomous poem

Isis

*The heart of education is the education of the heart...*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

12 posted 2001-01-07 07:29 PM

Sven,

any words from you would make a
woman's heart melt. you are one of
the sweetest and most compassionate
people/poets i've met in a long time.
this is just beautiful. im sure it made
her happy.
take care.
amy

~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~

athena4
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since 2000-12-10

Posts 622

13 posted 2001-01-07 08:39 PM

Sven,
If anyone's heart can bring her there, yours can. Simply beautiful....
Much Love, Elise

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

14 posted 2001-01-08 08:56 PM

thank you all my friends. . . it is amazing how the simplest words can convey so much. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

15 posted 2001-01-12 04:20 PM

And your reply said so much. *S* I like this one very much, Sven!

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

16 posted 2001-01-12 05:24 PM

This is very touching SVEN, a sweet poem and I thank you for the delightful read...
~*coco*~

Denise

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17 posted 2001-01-12 08:31 PM

Very touching, Sven, I agree! Beautifully done!

Denise

One Who Understands
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa

18 posted 2001-01-18 03:12 PM

there is a a certain beauty to this one. Thanks for sharing

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