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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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Why do I float like driftwood? < !signature-->whenever i think of you floating freely an aura, an aura of a sapphire hue enchanting nights I surrender crimson lips and eyes lilac blue Do I portray sweet temptation? behind the curtain of my smile in the bedroom of my thoughts seducing slowly like a sundial let us get lost within the fork in the road like a carriage in fog of the night within the silhouettes of love brushed by soft eyelash of moonlight when you cannot be close to my side reins of my thoughts,i cannot hide the phantom of your persona may take me for a buggy ride A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 01-06-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Why do I float like driftwood? whenever i think of you floating freely an aura, an aura of a sapphire hue enchanting nights I surrender crimson lips and eyes lilac blue Do I portray sweet temptation? behind the curtain of my smile in the bedroom of my thoughts seducing slowly like a sun dial ================= Victoria this lovely, the imagery in that first verse alone was perfect. wonderful use of metaphor in this... that sundial line is very cool creative and unique comparisons very well done take care jm Am I loved by my words Will my vows weather the tide Bended knees can forsee all the rhythms of life And a heart can be held without pride ~Vante |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Why do I float like driftwood? whenever i think of you floating freely an aura, an aura of a sapphire hue enchanting nights I surrender crimson lips and eyes lilac blue I agree with Janet Marie...this could not be more perfect... This is magical, Victoria...and lovely... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ V ~~~ What beauty you paint into the thoughts of this poem..........romantic carriage rides in the fog, that just sounds so heavenly! Thank you for putting this special poem here!!  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful.....lovely imaginations....love it very much my friend. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Victoria, this is so, so ,so stunning doesn't describe it, but it's the only word I can think of. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
~V~ you describe such beauty and love when you write like this, hues, and lilac blue, crimson lips, or silhouettes of love....there were too many great verses for me to pick just one...beautifully done...  Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you janet so much..nice to hear from you ..hope your holidays were pleasant.. HUGS..Breathe..thank you and i am pleased you peeked in tonight..appreciate your nice comments sunny..i am so glad you stopped by sunny.and it is always a pleasure hearing from you kethry..i will write on ha..hopefully forever..thank you for taking time to read tonight Greeneyes..thank you for your kind reply.. always nice hearing your nice comments ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I LOVE the imagery here!!!! Robert PS: please re-add me to your ICQ. I lost everything to the virus. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Okay........I am bowing to you my friend. This was beautifully penned in both imagery and in the flow. I was completely taken by this gem of yours and I do believe that it is my favorite of yours to date. With this one, you have reached a new pinacle in your poetry. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
charisma..thank you very much..so glad you enjoyed dear lady.. robt..thank you robt..i was wondering last night how you and snow white were doing haa..  mark..thank you so much, that is so nice of you to say..it was a fun write..and you inspire to keep writing with those sweet comments ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This caught my fancy, every word. I seduce like a sundial too. Only the one that says "grow old along with me, the best is yet to be!" ha ha loved this, Victoria "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
nice and easy does it haa..thank you kathleen..happy you enjoyed.. ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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