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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
baby words a simple thing for all to read to ponder and guess at a meaningless mean make what you want of the words and verse then tell of your thoughts of your hiss and curse spew the truth out of your mouths give me your guts and cleanse your bowels find the faults in rhyming schemes drag the phrase through mudly scenes maim my children then hide the crutch crawling worms they'll turn as such infesting ears and eyes upon the ones who kill my wordly spawn m.a. miller 01.05.01 [This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 01-05-2001).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
sounds like you just came from the crit forum... lol... kidding, but oh yes how I think we can all relate to this, how a poem seems perfect until a little fault appears, then you fix that fault and another appears, I guess that is the challenge of being a poet. Though I have nothing but praise for this one. < !signature--> It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 01-05-2001).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Wow Mark...you write so powerfully its hard to imagine someone finding fault... |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
hello Brian and Paula ... this is a kind of lashing out piece, but i was trying to capture the initial thoughts of any writer upon being criticized ... it's not really a statement of personal truths ... we spend so much time and effort finding that "just right" combination of words and phrases, then the slayer comes and kills the baby, if you know what i mean? ... thanks so much for reading ... i know i don't reply enough to other writers here on Passions Open Forum ... maybe i should try the Critical Forum and chance spilling children's blood? ... thanks again for reading. My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Miller, It is very hard when others criticize and you penned the emotion very well in this. Sometimes it is like killing the baby. write on, be strong Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh my!!! Sounds like you've been to an unmoderated forum (horrors!) Oy! The stories I could tell you... excellent write, and one for thought... now STAY HOME!!!! lol... |
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