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Alwye

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In the space between moments

0 posted 2001-01-04 10:43 PM

Sharp eyes, quietly alight
Shifting above a lazy smile
Glimmer with thoughtful rebellion
And a poignant wander-lust
As with pointed, intense lyrics
And lilting, ghostly melodies
She weaves passion into life.

The music shimmies
In waves of soulful abandon
By the path of steel string,
Connecting raw, unleashed emotion
To the earthy vocals
Throbbing from her throat.

A powerful defiance
And the embodiment of freedom
Cling in a distinct mixture
To her every word
As shadowy hints of her dreams
Casually reveal themselves.

A spirit thick with airy wisdom
And still possessing wild youth
Lounges gently before me,
Her eyes always gleaming
With a thoughtful rebellion
And the unmistakable urge
To wander free.

*Note- this is based on my guitar teacher, one of the most unique and truly genuine individuals I've ever known.

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

Stan
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since 2001-01-01

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Inland Empire Southern California

1 posted 2001-01-04 10:55 PM

You know I think it may also take a thoughtful rebel to read another so well. And it is written so well that the accolade at the end also rings true Good job!

Dusk Treader

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since 1999-06-18

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St. Paul, MN

2 posted 2001-01-04 10:58 PM

I think you caught her spirit here perfectly. I liked the phrase "thoughtful rebel" and I think it describes her perfectly, and also her penchant for wanderlust. Great poem, I'm sure Lisa would beam if she saw this!

Abrahm Simons

"I'm not sick, but I'm not well, and I'm so hot, cause I'm in Hell." - Harvey Danger

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

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3 posted 2001-01-05 01:38 AM

Krista this is fantastic!
Your guitar teacher will love this, you are going to give it to her, yes?

Beautifully written Hon

Maree

btw, love your signature

I need a lullaby
a kiss goodnight
Angel sweet love of my life
Oh, I need this

~Natalie Merchant~

Kit McCallum

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4 posted 2001-01-05 07:29 AM

What a beautifully descriptive tribute for your teacher Krista! I do hope you are going to share this with her ... she sounds like a wonderful and exciting person ... you sound as if you've captured her very essence, nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Alwye

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In the space between moments

5 posted 2001-01-05 10:40 PM

Stan- I suppose I have some of that spirit in me...I'm just too shy to let it out. Thanks for your comments, I appreciate it!

Abrahm- Thank you sweetheart, your kindness means the world to me, as always.

Maree- Thank you very much my friend! Yep, I e-mailed it to her and she loved it... *beaming* Hehe, and I like your signature too!

Kit- Thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked it.

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

Poet deVine

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6 posted 2001-01-06 12:17 PM

Beautifully done!!! Did you show it to her? I bet she loves it...she sounds like a wonderful person.

jwesley
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Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

7 posted 2001-01-06 12:27 PM

Guess I totally missed it in this lovely write; even with all the bookmarks I still didn't seen anything but a daughter in it until I read your note. Wow. I don't usually misread that badly.

Beautifully written in any case and on reading it in the proper prospective, even more so.

jwesley

Alwye

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In the space between moments

8 posted 2001-01-06 10:46 PM

Sharon- Thank you! And yep I showed it to her and she absolutely loved it.

jwesley- I suppose it could probably be read that way also. I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you very much for reading!

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

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