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She Sleeps |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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She Sleeps She sleeps in tender sweet repose With breath as fragrant as a rose So peaceful is her slumbering face With head in pillows deep embrace Her hair is captured by the moon In opal light of glowing room And she is still as shadows creep In blankets comfort wrapped in sleep What wondrous dreams consume her head Contentment’s smile in angel’s bed He wonders if she dreams of him Caressing her in morning’s dim He dare not wake her silent bliss So rare a moment’s peace as this Oh, how he’d like to hold touch her face And hold her tight in his embrace But not this time, for she will wake And then recall his tragic fate So he just hovers o’er her face And soothes her flesh in sheets of lace For if she wakes, her heart will weep And she’s content within her sleep Elizabeth Santos |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Beautiful work here. Simply beautiful. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Starts out tender and sweet, with a sharp twist of sadness at the end. Great work, as always. Corinne |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Liz- such a silent sadness within these beautiful and tender words... 'She sleeps in tender sweet repose With breath as fragrant as a rose So peaceful is her slumbering face With head in pillows deep embrace' 'He dare not wake her silent bliss So rare a moment’s peace as this Oh, how he’d like to hold touch her face And hold her tight in his embrace' this truly touched my heart, my friend.  hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lady Santos, this should have come with a tissue warning.... this is rare love...rare, and indeed, magical... so I shall put it away, safely, to reside forever as a favorite... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I know I commented on this yesterday! (looking baffled) Is the server trying to make me lose what's left of my marbles? LOL. Doesn't it know I don't need the help? As I said yesterday (I think *G*) Elizabeth, this poem is wonderful. *S* It's so tender and sad and brimful of love... beautiful! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Elizabeth...for a love such as yours he will wait forever for you to wake...there are tears for this one...beautiful |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh Liz....this is really beautiful....you have penned here a wonderful piece, superb. Charisma |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Elizabeth~ I was doing fine till I got to the ending, then my breath caught in my throat, and the tears spilled down and I still can't stop them.......stunning....... -SEA |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very beautifully written, Elizabeth, and heartbreaking too. HUGS Denise |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful mystic presence of a loved one caressing the sleep of their past love.. wonderful rhyme scheme with such a bearing on the feeling of connection...I love the mood abovethe peacefulness of sleep Elizabeth... very well done as usual ....I enjoyed it very much.......ethome |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Your comments are all so kind and truly warm my heart. Thank you so very much for taking time to read and comment. This time, suthern, I got the meassage.Thank you everyone Liz |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Liz tender hugs to you sweetheart this is so absolutely beautiful and tender straight from your warm, tender heart ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
a beautiful poem as beautifully wrought, perfect rhyme and meter, and the last two lines are exquisite...good work! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Tracie, Thank you for the warm hugs, they are much needed today, Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem Becki, Your remarks are so kind, Thank you Liz |
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jonmcm Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222England |
This is a lovely poem Elizabeth Jon |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Tears fall freely at the reading of such eternal love that you write about here so beautifully. Thank you so much for sharing this with me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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