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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2001-01-04 06:43 AM

Explore...(Ghazal)

Bathed in dreams that search for more
Leave feelings traveled for one to explore.

Candlelight shimmers on pale to implore
Awaiting the dark of a strangers explore.

In liquid black, his shadow comes fore
Painting with touches, in sighs of explore.

Seductively treasured, he opens the door
Melting the moments, flamed in explore.

Surfacing she, he devours her shore
Heating the night, till morn will explore.

Sustaining the hold, of hungers outpour
Erotic the present, of borrowed explore.

Unfolding her dreams yields realitys core
A reactor of loving, a nuclear explore.

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

1 posted 2001-01-04 09:36 AM

i have never written one of these..ill have to try sometime..lovely ms wynter

~V~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

Agust P
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since 2000-12-29

Posts 157

2 posted 2001-01-04 10:22 AM

I enjoid reading this one, very good and beutiful, thanks

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

3 posted 2001-01-04 10:40 AM

Morning Wynter,

Lovely, just lovely.

BC

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

4 posted 2001-01-04 10:43 AM

Very beautiful, Wynter, enjoyed reading...

-Tier

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

5 posted 2001-01-04 11:27 AM

Very nice format. I don't know the rules to this form but it sure looks like it would be fun. You did a wonderful job in this one but of course you would. Thank you for introducing a new style to me.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2001-01-04 05:28 PM

~Victoria, they are actually very easy but a little trying in that they are repetitious.. you should try one..*s

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2001-01-04 05:40 PM

There ya go again, with all of your thought showing!!! written in your usual graceful style...enjoyed the read, wynter..

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

8 posted 2001-01-04 06:41 PM

I have read beautiful poems in this form before - but the sensuality of this one stands out - most beautifully

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

9 posted 2001-01-04 07:13 PM

This is fantastic, it literally feels "charged up" I loved it!

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart

Kathleen

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

10 posted 2001-01-04 07:23 PM

wonderful done.....and I love the form too wynter...

((hugs))
Charisma

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

11 posted 2001-01-05 05:05 PM

I don't know how that man could ever leave someone so seusually in love with love and life!

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

12 posted 2001-01-06 01:45 AM

Agust P- thank you so much for the read and your kind words

BC- just trying to keep up with you and your many "lovelies"

-Tier- it's always a pleasure when others enjoy my words..thank you

~Wynter

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"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

13 posted 2001-01-06 01:51 AM

Mark - Mark the format is simple..and can have many variations, mainly that the last word on the second line of each is to be the same and other variations are the first line of the first couplet ends in the same word...and the rest can either rhyme or not..depending on what you choose...I posted the other two variations called On Life..earlier this week.

You are so sweet, serenity...I try to write sensual in a romantic sort of way..*s

Well when I please Bill.. I know I have done "good" ...thank you

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

14 posted 2001-01-06 01:55 AM

Nakd--Unique form. Wonderfully done. Enjoyed the read.

Poeminister

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

15 posted 2001-01-06 01:58 AM

Kathleen-

I was "charged up" ...what little good it did me....

Charisma- the form can be a challenge just to keep it from becoming so monotonous ...huggzz to you

E...~~sighing~~ I haven't a clue either...just after 30 plus years...he fell "out of love" with me...and should have told me so several years ago...guess I couldn't do for him what someone much younger can now...and I no longer blame him...just hope he finds a continued happiness elsewhere and someone that will put up with all his *whatevers* ... trying to be kind here...

and you did make me feel good saying that..but you know...what one sees is not always what another sees in someone.***making me too thoughtful this late at night*** huggzz to you kind sir

~Wynter
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"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 01-06-2001).]

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