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song to the night (pantoum)
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song to the night (pantoum) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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*sorry teach, I know I'm a little late, just couldn't get the darn thing posted soon enough!!!* open wide skies of night sing out stars of Heaven shine forth powerful light now this hour of seven sing out stars of Heaven melodies sweet and clear now this hour of seven dispel all our fear melodies sweet and clear waft over the dark land dispel all our fear calm us with your hand waft over the dark land melody of life, spirit song calm us with your hand creator, singer so strong melody of life, spirit song fill our lonely hearts creator, singer so strong teach us all the parts fill our lonely hearts shine forth powerful light teach us all the parts open wide stars of night ------------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
fill our lonely hearts shine forth powerful light teach us all the parts open wide stars of night beautiful Sven...wonderful words... ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Considering you and Marge threw such a great party, I'm sure the teach will forgive you. This is the first time I've seen this form of poetry. I do like it, and enjoyed your words. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Can a peanut-gallery greeter present you with an A? Thought so! Well done! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sven, Nothing like flying. Enjoyed the read. |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
I have, only recently, been aquainted with the pantoum form. I am still studying it. I think I like it, though it seems a difficult form. Thank you for giving such a fine example for furthur study. Well done. Sing while you may -The Prophet Qa'sepel Your pain is for you alone, As it is, As it was, As it will be forever, Amen -The Prophet Qa'sepel |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sven..... You wrote us a song, and now we can all sing along......loved this as I love all of yours!  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Sven,my friend,happy new year to you first  liked this |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wynter, thank you my friend. . . inot2B, thank you. . . this is what we worked on the Poetry Workshop forum this past month. . . funny, I can never seem to get them done before the end of the month!!  Sunshine, any time my friend. . . Sy, thank you Sir, glad that you enjoyed. . . Ian, indeed it is a difficult form to master. . . glad that you'll be able to use mine as something to learn from. . . thank you my friend. . . Sunny1, thank you. . . but do you really love all of mine??  Thank you again. . .vandana, Happy New Year to you as well my friend. . . and thank you. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sven--Wonderful pantoum...excellent writing... Poeminister |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sven love, this is as ever a perfect example of whatever this is called a 'pantoum' not that I know how to do them, or will ever be able to if I tried. (You know me and work love, if I don't have to put in too much effort then I'm happy!) Unless it's teasing my sisters of course Kari was trying, vainly as it turns out, the less is more theory, but as I said, I find it very difficult. Wonderful words beautiful form and it is delightful. That was almost succinct for me. Take care love Mushy < !signature-->Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning [This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 01-03-2001).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh my.....I love this song.....and love you for writing it, and sharing it with us. excellent pennes as ever. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Sven!! Lovely!! Denise |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Well, I cannot compliment you on the style, because I have no knowledge of it. I can say, however, that you're singing MY song anytime the subject is night time. Excellent work. It made me remember how much I love the night. Can I be your willful breeze, Come to touch, Your heart to ease? |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Poeminister, thank you. . . Mushy, thank you love. . . I'm glad that you liked this one. . . they definitely aren't easy. . . Charisma, thank you for reading my friend. . . and it's my pleasure to share my words with all of you. . . Denise, thank you my friend!! Temptress, thank you. . . the night has recently become my haven as well. . . so, you may see more songs of it. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow that's pretty stuff Sven!...... real great reading!.... thank you ethome |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sven, A touching nocturne worthy of tears... Your writing can always do that to me! Much love, Elise |
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