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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Your Words I will not read your words any longer, no, not ever again they make me feel so unreal and unexplained all totally unheard chasms caused by cryptic lift what a gift, what a gift earthquaked rumbles go unfelt leaving one to simple melt and in the written but verbal text how the hairs stand on my neck to think they were whispered by your lips as pen was guided by your fingertips and a chill rushes down my spine as you make me always feel as if you were always mine how can I read your words and let the thrill go unheard how could I read and not feel this ensuing unreal how can I read you when I would rather hold you and supple in my touch love you how can I go about unexplained? how might I cross the chasm? but when I see your gift your gifts how then to explain this unfailing lift of my heart so while I might deny to read know that I do oh, indeed and in the chary of my heart know that you are engaged here, in part. 01.01.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
quote: Oh, I know. I know. [This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 01-01-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I think we ALL know....you've described the sweet torture very well....more hugs, and you are AMAZING....don't know how you write so much and so well! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
the power of words...yes, when used by a true poet can be mesmerising, and you are one hell of a poet. It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ah, yes, I can relate to the bittersweet feeling reminiscent of "I'm not going to love you any more......of course, I'm not going to love you any less, either!"  This poem is very well written, sunshine, and shows how even beautiful words can hurt simply by the longing they create...but would we block them out? No...never...... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Intriguing read and wonderfully built upon your premise. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, Oh you know! As do I now  You're right sometimes words are not enough Take care love Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh words can be a such a torture...but not reading them....oh my....think that is impossible...... excellent my friend as always. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes Elizabeth, of course you would...my grandmother's name is yours, she does, too... serenity...my friend...please keep on writing from your heart... brian...omg, I think you have transformed me with these lines...but I shall still wonder...and always shall I doubt...but I shall never, ever call you wrong... 'Deer, "no, never"...and in this, we relate...thank you my fellow moderator... Virginia, you have the eye of a critic, and I bless you for it...thank you... Marsha, sometimes, a signal is worth more than words, and now, you know....thank you love...for when I know I am overwhelmed in words, than a light must shine... Charisma, you KNOW!...thank you... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sunshine--you tell the feeling so well...how can I...how can I...how can I not? Very well done! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie, how can I, can I...thankyou? Methinks so! {~,^} |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellently put... most wonderfully penned... Regards to you O Karilea, my friend, Sudhir |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome back Sudhir...thank you Sir, for reading...and commenting... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
*sigh* You've said it so well Sunshine. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Sven...words are so powerful...I've been hurt by them, lifted by them...and now that I am in the legal field...so very careful with them...as I try to be, in my poetry...guess I just "waxed" here...should anyone read this...words can be power...use them carefully... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
'Tis wonderful how mere words can convey so much, as you, with your words, touch us so deep. jwesely |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
James, Sir, this is why I try to be so very careful...once, I was not...the repercussion was not so great...thank you for reading... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
it's beautiful writing, k... excellent phrasing and language and emotion displayed..... such depth and range of feeling here.... it's got so much to it, it's almost as hard to read as the other one.... and that's a good thing in regards to writing.... you express yourself so elequently.... and with so much real emotion... *sighsighsigh*..... that's one sighs fits all..... you made me sigh a lot with this one.... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
doreen, today I heard someone cry...over my words...and I thought...perhaps I am ready...for so many of the poets here have engaged me in good wish to "carry on"...now that I have your blessings, perhaps I may... this then is what comes from "growing old" and right now, I am thanking all of my ancestors for the times I have had... and I bless all of the poets here... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I wish I could take this - and use it as a reply to this poem (and I admit some others) For nowhere else have I seen expressed half so well how poetry I read can make me feel and your poetry in particular |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mr. Yeats...should I inspire you, or others, to write...then WRITE...and transform me in that touch... and I shall thank you all my days.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The power of the words rest in the vision of the one using them and the level of mastery that they possess. Wonderful write my friend and we know the level YOU possess, we are constantly straining our necks upward to gaze upon you. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Time a second tumble through the blue pages. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mark, in your first reply I got this vision of being a pain in the neck... LOL... thank you, twice! |
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