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Sidewinder in dreamscapes ( written with Doreen Peri)
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Sidewinder in dreamscapes ( written with Doreen Peri) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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The sidewinder circles my head, as its coils tighten stealing the fading hours. The parched leather noose beats down keeping me in constant alert. Even here in the dead of night there is no dust, no gentle pillow talk or lullabies. Tangled in predictability; the clock counts down to decay. I am naked, restless as the Sahara damned to know my barrenness, as my horizon, scorched empty of any bacteria but me. Why wouldn't something grow? A ugly weed or even an weak egg, some sterile mystery to stir my appetite? And here on the cliff, consumed by the fire of lust twice twisted on the realm of decay, I down my drink -- Satin stained by lace dressed in black on a mesh background. Who would have imagined my leathered skin would be in a noose tight controlled by you? Who would have imagined my thirst would have led me to the desert? I'm parched. If you haven't abandoned the flame, let me drink you in. Hours are fading. I am recoiled, rejoicing, blending in the twist of all of it. You are my sidewinder -- my heavy swinging blow from the side my small desert rattlesnake thrusting your body diagonally forward. I'm lost in the pattern of you which I can't follow. Jade eyed, my insomniac spectre has lost the fight, gone back to hell, and left me with you instead. Still when you hold me like this I am a child again safe in candy dreams not the solitude of the adult carousel, you are my pretty sidewinder smothering and soothing. Written by Doreen Peri and brian madden It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What imagery! Applauding you both! Well done! Collaborate again Please! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
**I'm lost in the pattern of you which I can't follow...love that line and think I know this feeling * this was a wonderful poem, you two *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I cannot say enough about this. Yes, I see both of you in this, such powerful words and life is not only beautiful but unfortunately, ugly as well. I tend to write only of the beauty but you know at times, this is needed. This is exceptional writing. I'm very impressed. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And here on the cliff, consumed by the fire of lust twice twisted on the realm of decay, I down my drink -- Satin stained by lace dressed in black on a mesh background. Who would have imagined my leathered skin would be in a noose tight controlled by you? Who would have imagined my thirst would have led me to the desert? I'm parched. If you haven't abandoned the flame, let me drink you in. Hours are fading. I am recoiled, rejoicing, blending in the twist of all of it. ================= oh YEAH.. me king and queen of metaphor are back on their thrones... way cool you two ... WAY!! Happy New Year to the both of ya's later-royalty-gators eve-a-gator Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
very good work here. it took me on a trip and I loved it. Love and light, Richard |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, I knew of course, that this collaboration would be a winner. And it is most incredible. Happy New Year to you both Sandra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
brian and Doreen--what a word trip, my dears..great collaboration...I loved it! Happy New Year!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Loud applause here!! There are writers who compliment each other very well. In rhyme, I feel that way writing with Kit. In free verse with powerful metaphors, you two are a perfect match. I would love to see more of this wonderful collaberation  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, you two! But of course! Fabulous imagery! Denise |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
thank you, brian, for again writing with me... as always, it was a wonderful experience... you are a gifted writer and inspire me.... (as always, too, you had to wait a few weeks for my stanzas, huh? lol... sowwy  )thanks to all for reading and for your very kind replies.... and i'll probably be typing this in thread after thread today and tonight... so if i said it to you already, i'm saying it again!!! HA!... hehe Happy New Year!! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
WOW! Powerful writing and incredible imagery from you both! Knocked my socks off with this one, great writing to you both, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
TO everyone who replied thank you for your glowing comments, and a very special thanks to Doreen for the poetry and friendship. HAPPY NEW YEAR TO ALL It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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