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Piece Of Me
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Piece Of Me |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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~ PIECE OF ME ~ I'll give you a piece of me a part of my soul to hand to you my promise that I'll never let you go ~*~*~*~*~*~*~ I'll give you a piece of my heart evermore devoted to only you you are enchanting as the soft dew on a blooming rose I love you for you ~*~*~*~*~*~*~ I'll lend to you the reflections in my eyes so that you may see how beautiful you are to me as love twirls it's rapturous spell before you setting you free within sweet reverie ~*~*~*~*~*~*~ I'll breath for you a piece of my smile my laughter to fill your days you are my dream, my truth, my happiness in sunlight my heart now basks and plays ~*~*~*~*~*~*~ I'll share with you my hope and my faith so that you may feel that life is now wonderful because of you I'll stand by your side adoring thee through thick and through thin this is my vow, simple, yet forever true *By Melissa Honeybee* The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
This could be VOWS said at a wedding. You have promised to share the best pieces. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
truly beautiful Melissa. . . wonderful. . .  --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Melissa~ Such lovely pieces of your heart~ 'I'll breath for you a piece of my smile my laughter to fill your days you are my dream, my truth, my happiness in sunlight my heart now basks and plays' I love this one bestest ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I could neither offer nor recieve vows I would hold in higher esteem - you have captured the true essence of what real love means - I cannot praise what you've written enough!!! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Beautiful poem, and I agree with Wilfred, these words could only come from true love. It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
OMG this is the way i want a Lady to feel about me someday. This is wonderful writing. ~~~BIG SIGH~~~ I loved it. Love and light, %Richard |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Call 1-800-Hallmark............yeah, this one for sure really pins down the meaning of true love and the feelings and dedication that go with it. Beautiful writing my friend. Now look who has grown back into the elite side of her poetry. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you so much to everyone for your replies, I wasn't sure if my poem was good enough, I thought it was perhaps too simple, but now because of all of your great comments, you've made me feel good about it Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
in simplicity is beauty my friend. . .  --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"I'll breath you a piece of my smiles my laughter to fill your days." I'd like about a hundred years of this...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I haven't read such a beautiful expression of love, devotion and loyalty for such a long time. This poured out of the heart...very well done! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
James - I'm glad you found a favourite line...I hope that it does happen to you Ethome - Thank you so much! I'm so glad that you "felt" my words The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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