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athena4
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0 posted 2000-12-30 07:20 PM


           Only For The Moment

In this moment,
stolen and borrowed like hours made of sand...

Is this my time, in my thirty-fifth summer
to gracefully be your dancer.
A naked ballerina
in a performance that is a paradox
of all I believe to be real.

For I know,
you are not the quintessential chevalier'
that rides in and out of my fantasies,
carrying my inner-most desires
to horizons untouched.

Love is an unspoken word (by you).
Fully, and completely exempt
in this sanctuary you and I journey to
when reality turns to anarchy,
and time will allow.

But, when you touch me,
you can take me to Eden and back again.
You can paint my portrait,
as I watch your hands make it beautiful.
You're gentle and wild,
and I'm a virgin angel when I'm in your arms,
for no one has touched me the way you do.

When you wrap your passions and strength
around me,
the turbulent storm that stirs
in my restlessness
ceases its torment, for the moment.
You are a suspension in time,
at a place in my life
where I need to escape to that castle
you build for me.
A place of refuge,
where the rain doesn't fall from my eyes,
and sadly, your embrace hold no conditions.

And so, for this moment
you can captivate me
and hold my private hunger
in your secret desires.

You can take that to bed with you in the darkness,
when I am only a distant memory in your mind.
Perhaps,
a nuance of beauty,
left etched upon your naked fire.

Or you can vanquish me
from all that is real to you.
Sequestering any recollection of the harbor
we dwelt in...for the moment

All I ask of you,
is when you become disenchanted
in the haven we have created,
and the embers no longer burn,
You will remember me
as a beautiful dancer
that brought some of your dreams to color,
and held your passion gently in my arms,
for a little while
...Even if it was only for the moment.


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SpitFire
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1 posted 2000-12-30 07:41 PM


~You have a way with words that I truly, truly appreciate. So glad that I stopped in on this. There's a lot in here, in so many well constructed lines. I admire your work. *Peace.
athena4
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2 posted 2000-12-30 07:52 PM


Spitfire,
  Thank you so much. I'm so glad you stopped in, too! Peace to you as well...
            Elise

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-12-30 08:25 PM


Elise~
This is lovely -

'All I ask of you,
is when you become disenchanted
in the haven we have created,
and the embers no longer burn,
You will remember me
as a beautiful dancer
that brought some of your dreams to color,
and held your passion gently in my arms,
for a little while
...Even if it was only for the moment.'


And memories are made for moments like this.
In soft remember ... sometime - somewhere.
~*Marge*~




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catalinamoon
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4 posted 2000-12-30 08:53 PM


Stunning portrait of an insecure but beautiful love. I love it all, but I think this is my favorite part:
You can take that to bed with you in the darkness,
when I am only a distant memory in your mind.
Perhaps,
a nuance of beauty,
left etched upon your naked fire
Awesome,
Sandra

athena4
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5 posted 2000-12-30 09:00 PM


Marge,
   Thank you so much for the beautiful words.  Yes, the soft remembering is sometimes all we have...
         Elise

Catalinamoon,
      Well, you know who this is about! Thanks for the sweet reply, Princess.  
           Elise

tracie66
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6 posted 2000-12-30 09:08 PM


You certainly brought the moment to life in this.....wonderful writing, so very visual and captivating a piece....well done
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



athena4
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7 posted 2000-12-30 09:21 PM


Tracie,
    Thank you for the kind words. Writing it makes me relive it, in a virtual kind of way!
           Elise

RobertB
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8 posted 2000-12-30 09:48 PM


so hauntingly real life.

Robert

Sven
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9 posted 2000-12-30 09:53 PM


quote:
All I ask of you,
is when you become disenchanted
in the haven we have created,
and the embers no longer burn,
You will remember me
as a beautiful dancer
that brought some of your dreams to color,
and held your passion gently in my arms,
for a little while
...Even if it was only for the moment.


these lines speak to the heart of one who has known the moment. . .

thank you Elise. . .  

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Lady Lightning
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10 posted 2000-12-31 11:53 AM


You have such a wonderful way with your words...This was so very full of emotions..Emotions we all have felt at some point and will surely feel again..Made me sad to feel the impact this had , yet I loved it... Hugs and a very Happy New Year to you... ~LL~

The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown

athena4
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11 posted 2000-12-31 01:17 PM


Robert,
     Thank you so much! Happy New Year! I hope to read more from you.
       Elise

Sven,
   As always, you know what I am feeling "for the moment".  I wish for you a Happy New Year, and all the beauty a Knight should embrace.  Have a wonderful year!
      Much love, Elise

athena4
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12 posted 2000-12-31 01:19 PM


Lady L,
   Thank you so much.  I wish for you only beautiful moments!! Have a great new year, filled with love and laughter...
             Love, Elise

ethome
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13 posted 2000-12-31 01:26 PM


Athena this is such a well written poem ....wonderful line structures and it's imbued with an ardent fulfillment of creativity from the end of your virtual pen...well done indeed!  I'm sure he will remember the dance if he's ever silly enough to leave. How could he forget I couldn't ...take care... have a great new year.....ethome
athena4
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14 posted 2000-12-31 05:50 PM


Ethome,
   Thanks for the lovely reply. And I hope he does remember the dance!  May you dance in happiness and love in the new year.
   Happy New year, Love, Elise

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
15 posted 2000-12-31 05:56 PM


When you wrap your passions and strength
around me,
the turbulent storm that stirs
in my restlessness
ceases its torment, for the moment.
You are a suspension in time,
at a place in my life
where I need to escape to that castle
you build for me.
A place of refuge,
where the rain doesn't fall from my eyes,
and sadly, your embrace hold no conditions.

And so, for this moment
you can captivate me
and hold my private hunger
in your secret desires.

==============================


Absolutely wonderful poem.  I loved every line in this one but the above lines for some reason really stood out for me.  I applaud you on this one.

athena4
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16 posted 2001-01-01 01:32 AM


Mark,
   Thanks so much for the lovely reply. I'm glad this one touched you.  Sounds like you can relate to "those moments".
   Have a wonderful new year, Elise

maxtec1
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Garland, Tx
17 posted 2001-01-01 03:02 AM


very good writing. I enjoyed the read.
love and light,
Richard

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