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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2000-12-29 10:38 PM



In the September of My Years

(for more of Rupert Brooke :  http://www.geocities.com/Athens/Delphi/7086/brookeidx.htm

Rupert Brooke said
"I have been so great a lover..."
I thought on that
For I too have known the pain,
Wonder, surely astonishment
But do I think to cheat death?
Not a bit
Yet still I envy him his words
I've yet to see the equal of,
"The inenarrable godhead of delight"
Or from THE HILL:
"You said 'Through glory and ecstasy we pass;
...When we are old, are old'"
And as I peruse the well-worn pages
Of all these words I love so well
Knowing my phrases cannot even hide
Below his brilliant shadow,
I can look back and forward too
Knowing I learned some from errors made
Did my best no enemies to make
Held out my hand to those in need
Be they derelict or indigent
Single mother or out of work

Yes I've stumbled, fallen too
Yet for my children I came through
And know that love abides in them
So if a love to carry me
Forward to eternity
Has not blessed me with lover’s bliss
I move in comfort – without a kiss
Tried with words  - to share my vision
Of what I’ve seen connubial
Love sworn in youth and kept through senile
Sparkles in rheumy eyes that beguile
Such love exists and God’s not deaf
So yet I may see
"The inenarrable godhead of delight"
And know Sir Rupert Brooke was right
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Great souls have wills; feeble ones have only wishes.

             ~ Chinese Proverb ~



[This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 12-29-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-12-29 10:45 PM


I loved the feel of this one Bill.  It says it all with we learn from our mistakes.  Well done!  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free.
Donna Smith


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2 posted 2000-12-29 10:48 PM


When you look within, then share...

then it is that none of us can ask for anything more...

thank you, my friend, Mr. Yeats...

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3 posted 2000-12-29 10:51 PM


Bill--you touch my heart with the beautiful poetry of yours...thank you.
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4 posted 2000-12-29 10:56 PM


Bill...you came through for your children....no more need be said. Excellent writing, my friend ...
Denise
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5 posted 2000-12-30 12:11 PM


Beautifully written, and very touching.

Denise

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6 posted 2000-12-30 02:05 AM


Beautiful my friend
ethome
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7 posted 2000-12-30 04:34 AM


Well Bill whatever visions you have taken out of the shared spousal part of your life you have certainly shared here with such insight and wisdom. I really love how you've turned the summation qualities of this poem into such poetic beauty....very very well done sir!!
Wilfred Yeats
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8 posted 2000-12-30 03:28 PM


Everyone -
I must tell you - as I always must - how much I appreciate your responses.
Please don't think me petty if I complain that no one seemed to notice the part Rupert Brooke played in my composition - Because I believe rightly or wrongly all most of you know of him is what you learned in HS English - most likely his sonnet "The Soldier" and nothing else. What I hope and pray is that I've stimulated an interest in his writing sufficient to make you want to read more.

Either way - Thank you all so much for reading  

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9 posted 2000-12-30 03:54 PM


heartfelt words inhere.....it touched my heart deeply, knowing how true your words are.

(((warm hugs))
Charisma

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10 posted 2000-12-30 03:56 PM


I have seen some of Brooke's writing, but will have to search out more now. . .

Bravo Sir, we can all take lessons from you. . . and we should. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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11 posted 2000-12-30 06:44 PM


Wilfred,
    Just beautiful!  "And yet for my children I came through". That's what makes a man a hero, and you have every reason to be proud of such a magnificent accomplishment of love.
          Elise

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12 posted 2000-12-30 06:53 PM


Wilfred~
I was reminded immediately of 'The Wayfarers',
one of Rupert Brooke's loveliest writes.
Thanks for sharing this.
~*Marge*~


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Wilfred Yeats
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13 posted 2000-12-30 11:33 PM


Charisma-
(smiling broadly here) thank you

Sven-
I feel certain you'll be gratified for the endeavor - Thanks

Elise-
More thanks - Really -  

Marge-
"...Do you think there's a far border town, somewhere,
In which I'll find you waiting... ... and we'll go... ...Into the waste we know no, into the night?"
Of course you've chosen one of his best -  

Extra thanks to you

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