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In A Way
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In A Way |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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In A Way Watch the nocturne of the night Dignify the end of day. Sweeping fractures of bright light Turning gold to silver grey. Savor colored drifting hues Weeping down horizons sky Blending into deeper lieu Soothing blue into the eye. Watch the magic shifting scene Put to sleep the awesome splay Look upon the philistine Time to death another day. Feel the sorrow of its gone Melancholy of its past Yielding life so new be born Giving up its time of last. Are not we all, in our own way As beautiful as end of day? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is a magnificent poem! I bow to your gift with words THis is one of my favorites, for sure Simply exquisite Liz |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Seymour I have to agree with Elizabeth..just a great work and I have to answer yes I think we are for sure!! Well done! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Your words are music to my ears. Love Sy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a lovely, exquisite way to bring a closing to a day, a time, and to feel comfort in coming sleep... thank you Sy... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Watch the nocturne of the night Dignify the end of day. Sweeping fractures of bright light Turning gold to silver grey. Savor colored drifting hues Weeping down horizons sky ====================== Look upon the philistine Time to death another day. Feel the sorrow of its gone Melancholy of its past =========================== "Are not we all, in our own way As beautiful as end of day?" Well .. YOU ARE baby  and so is this gift of poetry Sy this is so awesome You talent for penning "subtle" imagery is showcased here to perfection... you have wrapped sundowns twilight in your other gift of cadence and rhyme and tied it up with your gift of unique and way cool vocabulary choices ... and of course the bow of wisdom at the end... "Sweeping fractures of bright light Turning gold to silver grey." this is what I mean by subtle imagery yet it has so much impact I would have used 4-5 adjectives and at least 8-10 words per line in trying to describe that vision you just did (yeah yeah, I know I'm long winded)  lol"Dignify the end of day." and that is the COOLEST line I will read today Im sure. later-see ya on the dark side of the moon-gator *winkiewinkie* me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Yes, we are, Sy, each in our own way.... This is excellent writing, good sir |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Just exquisite....this one I keep, seymour. Poetic perfection!!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Lovely comment, thank you. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ 'Are not we all, in our own way As beautiful as end of day?' This is, without a doubt, the loveliest thought I'll envision this day. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea, You welcome my sunshine. *L* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, I love when your long winded and I'll meet you on the dark side of the moon or anywhere else. Winkiewinkie stinky. Balladeer, Comming from the old bard, I honored. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, So now you have a part of me. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Seymour ... what a perfect flow, and such a beautiful conclusion! I very much enjoyed this lovely piece!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, It is a good thought for the day. *L* |
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