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You & Heart |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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You & Heart I see you in the light feel you in darkest night hear you in hues’ twilight ever to know the all of right this you of my heart sense you in the here search you in the where seek you in the there aware of all the loving care this you of my heart breath you in the spring sear you in the summer sun in your autumn I fall under winter’s white I hum this you of my heart can this be the heart of me the you I hold inside of me would one think I’ve lost it all in your smile in your guile in your ever winning ways in this the you of my heart now I hope, nay, a prayer I send with loving care that you shall always dwell right here in part in this, the you of my heart |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Just Beautiful! ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Fresh and unique way of looking at that significant other in your life. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Breathtakingly beautiful, Karilea! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I see you in the light feel you in darkest night hear you in hues’ twilight ever to know the all of right this you of my heart =============== breath you in the spring sear you in the summer sun in your autumn I fall under winter’s white I hum this you of my heart ============== very cool Sun..very... love the analogies and metaphors lovely imagery laced emotions as well and the repetative line worked perfect. excellent later-muse on fire-gator  jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, this is absolutely a gem a pure shimmering diamond. Divine piece from you love it really and truly is. As always I love it, because it is as ever a beautiful product of your pen. Really excellant write take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
....and the gems continue to flow...another beauty, sunshine |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
and hopefully, whatever muse you have there, will remain. . . wonderful. . .  --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all... I do believe the muse is here to stay |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
When "You" and "heart" become one... Wonderful.. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sigh...Too perfect for words. Sandra |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
First - I read your words - find myself feeling such appreciation beyond my own words- Then - I read those prior replies - and know I cannot exceed them much as I desire - So - Take Marsha's words add Baladeer's and try multiplication - you may have some idea of how much I love this - In my humble opinion - your finest to date and if I am any judge - worthy of publication in ANY BOOK OF POETRY! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all again...and Mr. Yeats, please Don't Tell My Husband...he thinks I should publish too, but simply to get me up and out of my office...LOL...truly, thanks! |
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