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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2000-12-27 09:54 AM


You & Heart

I see you in the light
feel you in darkest night
hear you in hues’ twilight
ever to know the all of right
this you of my heart

sense you in the here
search you in the where
seek you in the there
aware of all the loving care
this you of my heart

breath you in the spring
sear you in the summer sun
in your autumn I fall
under winter’s white I hum
this you of my heart

can this be
the heart of me
the you I hold
inside of me
would one think
I’ve lost it all
in your smile
in your guile
in your ever
winning ways
in this the
you of my heart

now I hope, nay, a prayer
I send with loving care
that you shall always
dwell right here in part
in this, the you of my heart


© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2000-12-27 10:13 AM


Just Beautiful!
~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



VAS
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2 posted 2000-12-27 10:17 AM


Fresh and unique way of looking at that significant other in your life.
Denise
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3 posted 2000-12-27 10:54 AM


Breathtakingly beautiful, Karilea!

Denise

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2000-12-27 11:08 AM


I see you in the light
feel you in darkest night
hear you in hues’ twilight
ever to know the all of right
this you of my heart
===============
breath you in the spring
sear you in the summer sun
in your autumn I fall
under winter’s white I hum
this you of my heart
==============
very cool Sun..very...
love the analogies and metaphors
lovely imagery laced emotions as well
and the repetative line worked perfect.
excellent
later-muse on fire-gator  
jm

Some people find subtlety in strangers
if you find anything~let me in
Your eyes~you see everything
my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know

Marsha
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5 posted 2000-12-27 11:49 AM


Kari love, this is absolutely a gem a pure shimmering diamond. Divine piece from you love it really and truly is.
As always I love it, because it is as ever a beautiful product of your pen. Really excellant write
take care
               Majestic Marsha


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



Balladeer
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6 posted 2000-12-27 12:49 PM


....and the gems continue to flow...another beauty, sunshine  
Sven
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7 posted 2000-12-27 12:57 PM


and hopefully, whatever muse you have there, will remain. . .

wonderful. . .  

---------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
8 posted 2000-12-27 05:25 PM


Thank you all...
I do believe
the muse is here to stay

Nan
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9 posted 2000-12-28 07:39 AM


When "You" and "heart" become one... Wonderful..
catalinamoon
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10 posted 2000-12-28 07:46 AM


Sigh...Too perfect for words.
Sandra

Wilfred Yeats
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11 posted 2000-12-28 07:47 AM


First - I read your words - find myself feeling such appreciation beyond my own words-
Then - I read those prior replies - and know I cannot exceed them much as I desire -
So - Take Marsha's words add Baladeer's and try multiplication - you may have some idea of how much I love this -
In my humble opinion - your finest to date and if I am any judge - worthy of publication in ANY BOOK OF POETRY!

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
12 posted 2000-12-28 10:24 PM


Thank you all again...and Mr. Yeats, please Don't Tell My Husband...he thinks I should publish too, but simply to get me up and out of my office...LOL...truly, thanks!

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