»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #11
»
Undercurrents
| Open Poetry #11 |
|
Undercurrents |
|
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
|
 Undercurrents serene, the water is most serene, and one would never dream never dream of the riptide below calm, the still, still waters entice me calm and as a balm they serve to unnerve the soul and draw me on beyond the goal and stepping forth then stepping in, the undercurrents suck at my feet to greet the riptide of emotions pull me to my destiny haul me through the words of thee paint upon the scene serene and riptide me away |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
This is very beautiful and inspiring! The ocean moves me. I enjoyed your magic pen's journey. Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
||
|
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow! Karilea, you're simply taking my breath away with so many wonderful poems of late ... incredible imagery and flow in this beautiful piece ... just lovely!  Happy holidays and best wishes, /Kit |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea, Your poetry is getting so mature. This is a wonderful poem. *L* |
||
|
doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
whooooooshhhhhh............ i got pulled under, the wave crashed on top of my head.... i'm drowning in emotion out to sea, filling my lungs with salt water.... hehe... great write here, ms. K.... so much truth in here.... you're just wading, then jumping waves, then swimming and before you know it, the emotions take over and you're no longer in control... well, that's what i got out of it anyway... i tend to read myself in your words a lot...  |
||
Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Love the pull of this piece~ 'the undercurrents suck at my feet to greet the riptide of emotions' Yep ! It's happening ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
calm, the still, still waters entice me calm and as a balm they serve to unnerve the soul and draw me on beyond the goal ================= pull me to my destiny haul me through the words of thee paint upon the scene serene and riptide me away =========== ya know what Sun... this one goes in me WAY COOL file love that last verse...and the inner rhyme and the title ... very cool indeed jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
||
|
Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, this is the ultimate you are truly awe inspiring love this is so stunning. I'm dumb struck, really wonderful, utterly breath taking beauty Truly marvellous love Take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What a fantastic metaphor, sunshine... may your undercurrents bring you waves of pleasure and may your tides never ebb |
||
|
Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "Love is a fire. But whether it is going to warm your hearth or burn down your house, you can never tell." Joan Crawford |
||
|
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is spectacular writing...such strong emotions...I really love it |
||
|
RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Sunshine.....some somehow somehow somehow I understand this so perfectly! Robert |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all... |
||
|
Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So do you give lessons in the use of metaphors packed with the power of the sea in them? This one was beautifully penned and illustrated in your use of each word. Carefully chosen to make the most of the impact. Yeah, it sucked my in too!! A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
||
|
Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
"serene, the water is most serene, and one would never dream never dream of the riptide below" Pondering... Relating... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
calm and serene on the surface, raging underneath...this reminds me of what some close people say about me |
||
|
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey, this is great Sunshine! and this... and stepping forth then stepping in, the undercurrents suck at my feet to greet the riptide of emotions yup I love it! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this wouldn't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The most I can do is thank you all.. |
||
|
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
and the most we can do is to share this with as many people as possible. . . . . . I'm running out of words here my friend. . . it's just. . . just. . . so. . . beautiful just doesn't seem to do it. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sven, I think I'm speechless... thank you! Although I did not personally reply to everyone, I do appreciate your comments... this is a very intense poem for me, I am sure those that have read, understand... thank you again. |
||
|
catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Amazingly expressive, Kari, I love everything about this. Take care. Sandra |
||
|
nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
riptide me away great phrasing, Sunshine ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Cat, Wynter thank you |
||
|
Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Wonderful metaphor... Some of us are so adept at projecting serenity.. and shrouding our riptides... aren't we??... |
||
SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
It seems the undercurrents are always there, sometimes its what we secretly hope for.....wonderful write, I love this -SEA |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, Nan...some of us are....{~,^}....and some of us should just give in.... SEA...be careful of what you hope and/or wish for...it CAN come true.... |
||
|
Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
My God Karilea - is there no end - no peak - you cannot continue to surpass? -I just keep adding your poems to my treasure box - well past any 'hat trick' I might strive to reach. tell you I think this great - or that I loved it would be the understatement of the year. |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
As all of us have certain favored poets among the many fine poets that grace these walls, you perhaps may be among my favored readers, Mr. Yeats...always with a kind word, always with a boost up...I treasure your comments, and this particular poem has received a multiplicity of responses, more than I ever imagined...and you are in part responsible. Thank you... and again, thank you all, you've no idea what you do to my heart... |
||
|
ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I would most certainly hate to see you get riptided away..I'd sure miss you and these wonderful poetic streaks of genius that you place on my screen ( you just do it for me don't you?) take care and keep that creative pulse pumping.....ethome..... |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
