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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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not quite alive not quite dead and a simple sonnet echoes.... and there are things to do today and I don't care if they get done a lovely tone bewitches me I'd love to smoke but I won't roll... I'm in thirst and can't believe nothing wet will ever please and memories roll like dice across the table craps a game-- make you think twice and still to bet for a parlay come line and you roll... I wish the whistles bells would stop excitement in this dream of mine-- MAKE IT ALL--- oh make it stop... and give me cotton candied dreams for want of silence beg of scream silent whistles quiet dreams |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I'm in thirst and can't believe nothing wet will ever please for want of silence beg of scream silent whistles quiet dreams lots of lines I liked in this one, serenity  ~Wynter (awake too early once again)  |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
"and memories roll like dice across the table" LOVED THAT! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
been living somewhere in between for so long now..dont know no other way .. besides,it takes less effort to be complacent right?  ..yeah I know..I know..so why cant we live in poetry land anyway Hugs to ya me twin.. and ya know Im always hoing to find that one perfect lullaby so you can have those quiet dreams... love you muchly me girlie ... I do I do me There are moments ... when I Love you beyond the limits of my human heart ... ...you will always be mine. Collin Raye |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Really enjoyed this one, can identify so well with it...and the one comment in particular...Why can't we live in poetry land? Wouldn't it be wonderful! I wish I could make my living there, then I could be there all the time instead of 'too much of the time.' ;o} You have some really exquisite lines in this piece, fresh, original, yet familiar because they're so 'right on!' |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
You really packed some good lines in this one. Enjoyed this very much With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
THIS....is so good.... speaks my mind... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
I loved the sentiments in this piece.Fine work. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
for want of silence beg of scream ---------------- very nice senster love your work |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity, I was caught up in the expression here... This is an exceptional write and I most enjoyed the flow and the pace you set the whole poem to... HMMM... me likes alot coco |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 That last line...you knocked the wind out of me baby! Yes....quiet dreams...I'm right there wishing for that part right beside you. What a powerful weave...hugs and love in this one my friend~ [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 12-08-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I'm not going to say anything at all. Just know though,...*sigh*,...that I feel this and you. Too damn real K. *Peace always. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
If I could find a quiet dream myself then I would be more than happy to share it with you my friend. I will try to tiptoe a little quieter across your heart though if it would help.  Hugs my sweet friend.A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am over here giggling with the flu...ROFL...my sick butt off. Coco...I had completely forgotten about this one...and there you go again, digging through the back scroll...and I'm like, "huh?" and what's the first words I read? Not quite alive not quite dead... oh man..sometimes my life is just too rich in irony...but thank you much everybody, and especially the diligent coco, you made me smile pretty on a blah day! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Little one, I'm hoping Santa brings those cotton candy dreams...you're in my thoughts...good re-read... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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