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Metaphysical Mist
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Sunshine
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Metaphysical Mist see, what happens is I shall grow old ~ ancient of limb, my skin, grow cold and I shall only recall once of shy and tall that day I was kissed in the physical mist the love transcended all of love's intentions so great was the charm and we saw no harm being each one of two of the most blessed 'tis why it was I then loved him the best he came late to this lass some seasons had passed still one season left to come to her he swift did run all pasts left behind only him on her mind their love never blind pure treasures of kind so late, this loving season they'd known long the reason a relationship never physical more on the mystical where love therein trickled they reached far inside where true love resides reaching for the metaphysical they took essential reality blending charming duality with supernaturality transcending all the planes there, their love remained so shimmering fine like sparkling red wine commingling minds see, what happens is we shall grow old ~ ancient of limb, our skin, grow bold and we shall recall reliving days tall that day we kissed in metaphysical mist Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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This is very beautiful, Karilea! Very lovely! Denise |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
denise, I know that two exclamation marks mark it well! Thank you! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
youth has the physical Aged the metaphysical the truly blessed have both. this is beautiful, sunshine..... |
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Sunshine
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'Deer, you RD'd that quite well...and probably said it much better than I... thank you! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i could barely read it.... i'm crying... geez... it's beautiful... ((hug)) wonderful writing, sweet friend... how DO you do it? how do you see so clearly? i loved this poem...... |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sunshine--Lovely piece. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
how do I do it? All I know, little one, is that I have asked Him several times to forgive me...and then asked Him to allow me to forgive others... and then I share my experiences... and then He gifts me with wondrous mysteries... I hope you understand...there is a reason I am here...I don't know what it is...and I may becoming a little maudlin, but hey, you asked...soft laugh and when asked, I always answer... thank you Doreen, for being the inspiration that you are! Hugs, Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
just wonderful my friend. . .  -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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Poeminister, you snuck in. Thank you for reading...I am so glad you enjoyed it... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well this is interesting, I answer one poet, and another poet sneaks in...thank you Sven...I am glad you enjoyed this... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Ah - a 'Misty' "September Song" of sorts - from one who's only in the July of her life. but so perfectly wrought crafted with such heartfelt beauty it resonates in my very core like a tuning fork that does not die. Mist or no mist metaphysical or real - I see clearly. |
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John R Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 141Toledo OH |
Well written verse Sunshine. To join on both the physical and the metaphysical, could we ask for more? If a dream touches us, it exists to us as anything else that touches us. John |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
very lovelyand i understand this so very well. You expressed it, creatively to a T! thanks, Koko Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful vocab in this one Sunshine...I love this verse...... "They took essential reality blending charming duality with supernaturality transcending all the planes there, their love remained as shimmering fine like sparkling red wine commingling minds." I just got to love it... the whole piece is a beautiful creation....and you'll never be invisible to me when you write like this sweetheart!! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, how do you write beauty and truth so well? And I'll answer because you have been given a gift, it is as ageless as time itself. You have the gift of bringing that part of yourself, the inner core, and allowing it to find expression. You will never be any older to me, and I expect to all the family here, than Persephone herself. Eternally Spring, because you see with wonder within your eyes, you hear with love in your heart, and you feel with the light of truth. (And I am not being bias, I speak the clear truth, as always.) Ask my sisters they will tell you, that I only ever say what I feel. (And then they throw something at me, preferably a hard and heavy something.) You know that this is utterly divine, and wonderful don't you love. And that I love it, I really do. Take care Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, why did you not tell me this is your 9000 post, congratulations love. And it's wonderful as always Very Well Done Take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mr. Yeats, how kind of you to shave a decade or so off my time...I shall remember that...and thank you for reading...and I'm glad you saw through the mist... John R, I believe not...thank you... KoKo...thank you...I've still a long way to go before my poetry pleases me... But Ethome, if I always write like that, I would be boring some after awhile, No? but I so appreciate your kind words, thank you... Marsha [x2] for you, I shall be Persephone...and I will read up on her and write one of Spring just for you...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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