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| Open Poetry #11 |
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Fallen Angel |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Once she flew so free and high Above the palest cerulean sky Majestic as dawn’s entrance Exquisite as Luna’s radiance She wove stars within her hair Her manner meek, mild and rare Above a sapphire night she’d tenderly sway Among cherubs she would gleefully play Locks of ebony adorned ivory flesh Eyes of onyx...lips of ruby mesh Within the night she’s softly sing No fairer angel had ever taken wing Until her purity was put to the test A devilish saint became her guest Eyes of gold beckoned her to dance His touch wove an intriguing trance He whispered into her ebony hair Swam seductively in her onyx stare He held her ivory flesh close to him She bore the shame of the seraphim Her heavenly gifts had not been adjusted For the urge of touch her body lusted Sent from heaven’s gate within the night She turned and walked from the light With a tear upon her trembling chin Her earthly walk was about to begin She left her wings on heaven’s floor To return to the clouds nevermore |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
BDC, what a heavenly write, so full of humanity. Write on Kethry Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Once she flew so free and high Above the palest cerulean sky Majestic as dawn’s entrance Exquisite as Luna’s radiance She wove stars within her hair Her manner meek, mild and rare Above a sapphire night she’d tenderly sway Among cherubs she would gleefully play Locks of ebony adorned ivory flesh Eyes of onyx...lips of ruby mesh ================== He whispered into her ebony hair Swam seductively in her onyx stare He held her ivory flesh close to him She bore the shame of the seraphim Her heavenly gifts had not been adjusted For the urge of touch her body lusted =================== With a tear upon her trembling chin Her earthly walk was about to begin ==================== I CANT believe you put THAT picture of me up in here!!!ROTFLMAO yayayayaya (sorry it was too easy)hehehe well..I DO have an outfit like that ..its at the drycleaners yayayyaya LOL AHEM....anyway ..... VERY COOL weave me girlie girl .. my goodness the imagery in this is awesome love this lusty tale ...very cool use of metaphor and fantasy ... and the graphic..very cool love when your pen is spinning "golden" weaves. must be nice to have a muse  yayayalove ya me SS..glad to see your name here again ... not even being sick with "Squeaky voice" can stop that pen of yours for long  me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Great and well written tale, my friend! Enjoyed it twice now. jwesley |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Holly...the fallen angel...this is a beautifully told story...and reminds me of the turn-about of City of Angels...a movie I would watch again and again... this my dear, belongs in my library, which I am sure meets with your approval? Oh, thank you! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Holly this is so beautiful...what we are willing to give up for love...just beautiful |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
BDC--Exquisite writing. Enjoyed this muchly. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
 Oh what a wonderful thing metamorphis is when a butterfly changes to the beauty of an angel and kisses all that she touches. This my friend was simply beautiful and the imagery you know I loved. It truely shows just how far love can pull a heart when those strings are being played just right. You have stepped up (or should I say flown) to a higher level in this one. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ I think sometimes as it has been shown angels fly without wings of their own Wrapped so tightly within the embracing wings of love They soar to new heights on another's wings - lifted far above *Just a lovely and inspirational piece, dear poet. Thank you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Holly, you know I love this right!? Well if not you do. I adore this piece my friend. Written with such exquisite imagery, but I have come to expect no less from you and your gifted pen. You write with such heart and every line that you weave is pure magic. Take care. ~amy~ ~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow! Ok I may be a little biased but this IS magnificent my friend, fabulous images you have painted for us. I think Marge's words best sum up my feelings about this one, take care my friend! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Holly~ You must know by now that I LOVE angel themes!  The first few stanzas are beautifully penned with great imagery, I just love how you described the angel with such flair and uniqueness. For some reason this poem has affected me in a different way than it did the others. Yes, this is a beautiful tale, but, the ending was so sad and hopeless to me, especially the last stanza, it is very well written and hits the reader hard. I like poems that either start off with a happy beginning and a sad ending or vice versa, because it usually tends to have a great impact on the reader (they get to experience many emotions while reading the poem) - which is an excellent technique that you used. I didn't see the angel as an innocent sacrificing her wings for love like the others did, instead, I saw the angel as a once beautiful angel who choose lust and guilty pleasures over God only to face the consequences for betraying Him for a mere moment's ecstasy, hence the "fallen angel" theme. So, through my rambling, the others view this poem as a love poem, and yet I see it as a bittersweet poem, in that she was once beautiful and pure and now because she allowed this "devilish saint" to seduce her she failed "the test" and she now weeps and "bore the shame of the seraphim" and must not "return to the clouds nevermore." Basically I see it as a lust tale telling of the consequences. It's both beautifully fantasy-like and sad to me. I absolutely loved this poem, don't worry I'm not criticizing it at all, in fact, I'm printing out a copy. I am just wondering if I am not astute anymore because I am not in agreement with the other's opinions. But then again, each poem is viewed differently by everyone and means something different to each reader, that's what makes poetry special. Please submit this poem for the next Passions book!  Melissa < !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 12-20-2000).] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi My Beautiful Butterfly, This is so very beautiful and so wonderful to read over and over I am mesmerized by the sheer elegance of this piece , I am so glad to see you here, I hope all is well and have a great holiday, please came land at passions more your pen and your loving heart are missed, where did you find that picture? Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Wonderful, my Butterfly! Now I feel there is hope and happiness for the "fallen angel" in all of us. It is lonesome being perfect, I've heard. Always take time to share your beautiful thoughts with us. Love and Hugs, ME |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
BDC~  This is such a creative, beautiful poem........ -SEA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Alright I liked this a lot and that goes for that angel too...James |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 So well written and sooooo sad. Though this is fantasy, it has implications of true life. Pure and gentle souls who give their lives to lust. Actually this is more true to life than fantasy for angels truly are neither male nor female and do not make the choices like we. But, I do believe there are souls on Earth who reflect the presence of such angels. God Bless You, Bob <>< |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I never tire coming here to read...Your poem is lovely BDC...Happy Holidays, With Peace... Greeneyes *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
First of all let me apologize for being away from the formns...I've been ill and with the holiday rush I've been stuck out in the "real world"...shame on me Secondly I do not recall where I found this graphic...if I remember I'll be sure to let you know...must have been a late "surfing" night Kethry* Thank you so much for reading~ JM* It's not at the cleaners baby...what do you think sisters are for thank you so much for all you do for me everyday...much love to you SS~JW* Heartfelt thanks to you my friend~ Karilea* I've not seen the movie...but now I'll have to Thank you so much and as always it's an honor to be in your library~Paula* My thanks to you sweet lady...it means so much to have you read~ Mark* wow...what can I say to a graphic and a reply like that....I'm no angel believe me...but I thank you for believing otherwise my friend~ Marge* How beautiful...thank you so much for sharing that with me...It's an honor to inspire you~ Amy* Thank you sweetie..you are always an angel...and never will you fall Eagle* My biased friend....lol Yes I'm just as stuborn as you Thank you so much~Melissa* You are goooooooooooooooood!!! You saw right through this one and I'm beaming at you for it...yes we all read through our own hearts and see what we want...you've seen my heart in this..thank you~Cerenity* Thank you so much...I'll try to get back here as much as possible...believe me I miss all of you more than you could possibly know...Holiday wishes to you~ Mom* I don't think I'll have to fear knowing perfection...LOL Thank you my mom...I love you~Sea* Thank you very much~ James* I'm glad you enjoyed...thank you~ LHBob* Thank you so much...your reply touched my heart...God Bless you as well~ GE's* Thank you so much...and Holiday Blessings to you and yours~ [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 12-20-2000).] |
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John R Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 141Toledo OH |
Wow!!!! This is fantastic. From verse to verse I was captivated. If a dream touches us, it exists to us as anything else that touches us. John |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, This was FABULOUS!!!!!! I loved every single line. The imagery is awesome!!!!! This has to be one of the very best from your mighty pen my dear friend. Excellent job. Smiling big here. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Bravo! I love your way with words...Such enchanting imagery! I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Holly...How very beautiful..I always know when I see your name here that whatever I read is going to touch deep in the heart and soul...and this did just that... Another one to add to my overflowing collection.. ~LL~* Hope you're feeling better... The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
John* Thank you so much for your kind comments and for reading...it means very much to me~ LW* Thank you my friend...hope your holidays are as beauty filled as your heart is...Merry Christmas to you~ Breathe* Thank you from the bottom of my heart~ LL* It's an honor...thank you so much and yes...I'm starting to feel a little better...or atleast getting there I appreciate you asking |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
... Will you come travel with me? Shall we stick by each other as long as we live? |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
B_D_C, the more I see of this the more I think IWIHWT. Btw No graphic  Write on Kethry< !signature--> Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. [This message has been edited by Kethry (edited 12-26-2000).] |
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