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grimace...in the looking glass
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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spiraling into my dreams past the looking glass where every thing is as it seems alas the looking glass... every rhyme whispers beware fingers twined within my hair lips in grip of phantom's dare within the looking glass. Which ballet? should shadows please? That love should find me on my knees? And all God's mercy be surpassed as I become your looking glass.... Forget my face of taunt's regret... a lightly licking pirhouette... grant me grace allow me pass-- a grimace in the looking glass. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ seems like you are judging yourself way too hard sweetie pie......at any rate.....I wish I could make my thoughts come together like this.....you are awesome!  -SEA |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
S'en* No matter how long I stay away from this place you are always ready with a weave that knocks the wind out of me....wow. Excellent writing my friend. Love and hugs to you for the holidays....and everyday! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You make this look far too easy! Wonderful imagery, my friend.  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderful Sea, but Forget you face, never, grant you grace and allow you to pass, forever, your Smile in the looking glass. jwesley |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
every rhyme whispers beware fingers twined within my hair lips in grip of phantom's dare within the looking glass. Which ballet? should shadows please? That love should find me on my knees? And all God's mercy be surpassed as I become your looking glass.... ================== oh me twin...this is the coolest poem!!! this is poetically perfect ... what a very cool write ... the imagery, the metaphor ...the reflective emotions ...and kissed with your rhyme that I crave ... "Forget my face of taunt's regret... a lightly licking pirhouette" very unique and cool poem me sweet like the poet who wrote it love ya me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sometimes what we see isnt what we really are...but sometimes it is...this is way cool girlie...like it alot |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
All I see when looking at you is the reflection of heaven dancing across this ole cowboy's heart. Beautiful my friend and NO.....there is nothing wrong with my vision at all so don't even go there.....just get yourself to the dance. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Serenity, powerful writing especially loved the verse, every rhyme whispers beware fingers twined within my hair lips in grip of phantom's dare within the looking glass. just remember that looking glasses often distort reflections, your true reflection lies within and I can tell it is nothing short of beautiful. "In the shadowplay, acting out your own death, knowing no more As the assassins all grouped in four lines, dancing on the floor" Joy division |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Now I am grinning in the looking glass...oh god, no telling what you all imagine now... But I do thank you...but the point was simply that where there is self-loathing, there can be no beauty...but thank you for the encouraging words...lol(especially you Paula, for your tremendous faith in me...rofl)...this was just my follow up, to the "I am beautiful" statement in an earlier poem. GAWD, am I MOODY!!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Darling K... I dispute your statement...oh there is beauty - YOU just can't see it through self-loathing... but once you stop self-loathing... it's there...I promise.. Hugs K |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ And sometimes, little chickadee - We need to step back and look for what others see in us. Nice reflections ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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