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There is nothing solid on my screen
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There is nothing solid on my screen |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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There is nothing solid on my screen, though it shimmers as a midnight lake, the kind of pool where dreams might shine if everything was not sculpted from ice. In the early hours I can almost penetrate its defence and drink of the sweetest binary, even if its language remains cryptic to me. Our affair is like chalk and cheese Lovers, it smothers my penicillin spores in dust, caressing only briefly in ICQ or e-mail. It's that golden marriage where the magic is dead and two bodies sleep adjacent as strangers. Sometimes with in its world and even within mine I can not make the connection. There nothing solid on my screen, though I have a library of decadence, education, sin, higher learning and pop up porn at my finger tips. Its ultimate pleasures and horrors offer only fleeting sensation. In the mainframe I am limbless statue; Venus de Microsoft, the baby in embalming fluid lost in introspective. Oh here there is poetry, maybe this alyssum's one saving grace, networks and networks of passionate words but they are lived as alien recounts I can barely picture let alone force to stimulate. The people are pixels, little digital numbers, all computing in complete secretly. I have not yet touched your skin or reeled in joy from your breath… and In cyberspace no one can hear us scream. < !signature--> "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 12-19-2000).] |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
very good writing here friend, I enjoyed the read. Love and light, Richard |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"I have not yet touched your skin or reeled in joy from your breath… and In cyberspace no one can hear us scream." as usual..youre abstract nature leaves me with a wonder as to what to say...lol but i must say..i love this last bit.. hugs, g "people who need people are the luckiest people..." barbra s. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There is nothing solid on my screen, though it shimmers as a midnight lake, the kind of pool where dreams might shine if everything was not sculpted from ice. In the early hours I can almost penetrate its defence and drink of the sweetest binary, even if its language remains cryptic to me. ===================== It's that golden marriage where the magic is dead and two bodies sleep adjacent as strangers. Sometimes with in its world and even within mine I can not make the connection ===================== I have not yet touched your skin or reeled in joy from your breath… and In cyberspace no one can hear us scream. ==================== oh man.. you know that I know ..that you know... Bri-gator I relate to this one so much it hurts... we can connect and reach out across oceans and equators with a keyboard... but it wont ever replace the need to touch and make eye contact ... no matter how much we try to make it be enough. very cool poem of longing and unrequitedness Bri .. very cool sending a smile and a hug your way later-poetic-prophet-gator eve Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Like I said...this rocks... I am impressed by my first foray into the mind of Brian.. 'Its ultimate pleasures and horrors offer only fleeting sensation' I fully agree. Well met Sir  K[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-20-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: good grief, brian!!!! YOU are one fabulous poet, you know that??? this speaks to me loud (of course, i'm here in this box, too, with my own library, etc etc etc... but don't ask about the etceteras, ok? lol).... you've done a great job with this poem and it is truly truly 21st century EDGE poetry... and i hope you know what i mean, sincerely, i do... ok... times up... time to write another one... email me your first stanza... ok? i'm ready.... (if you're still interested?) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Richard, thanks for the reply. dgvarner, you know me ambiguous as hell,  I am not going to clarify the last piece, I will leave to your imagination. LOL thanks for reading and replying. Eveagator, it is the world we live in, where you meet wonderfful people that otherwises you would never get into contact with, for that I am very grateful, but you know well my reasons of yearning and frustration at the cyber world. Thank you for the smile and hug and for your very generous words. K, well welcome to my world, ain't always pretty but it makes for interesting reading. LOL. PLease fasten your seat belt you may expereince some turbulance. Thanks for the very kind words. doreen, "but don't ask about the etceteras, ok?" not if don't ask about mine. OK I am really blushing from your reply. It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: speaking truths again Brian...good job! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Domo arigato, Mr Roboto Himitsu wo shiri tai You're wondering who I am - machine or mannequin With parts made in Japan - I am the modern man...... I've got a secret I've been hiding under my skin My heart is human, my blood is boiling, my brain IBM great one Brian! as usual! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Venus de Microsoft, Excellent!!! not much more to say, Brian... ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Karilea, speaking the truth, a nasty habit I picked up lol, thank you for reading and replying. Ethome, you are scaring me,I may have to unplug you for a moment, reboot and hope that your glich sorts itself out. thank you for your very kind reply. ~Wynter, thank you for the glowing review. It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Venus de microsoft... grinnin' in sheer appreciation...gawd but I love ya! You are brilliant! |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I think, Brian, that you have just described the lot of us who are, in a sense, joined in marriage with this virtual extension of ourselves. Excellent write... *smiles* -Tier{Robin} |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i remember reading somewhere that a good poem includes the author's freshly thought-out metaphors that no one else has read before... well this is one example |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Wow! You can critique my poetry anytime! *running back to change the Picasso line in mine* Mind boggling and stunning... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
serenity, my faavourite line in the poem and at long last proof that I have a sense of humour. YOu have me blushing., and also my ego.. thanks forthe "brilliant" Robin, thank you for your very kind words. kaile, thank you for those very kind words, they mean a lot to me. Breathe~, be careful I might take you up on that offer...lol... thanks for your repsonse. There's a feeling of contentment Now that you are here I feel satisfied I belong inside Your velvet heaven" Depeche mode |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oops...I liked it so well you got a double comment here [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 01-06-2001).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Okay Brian...if you're not already published in at least 5 or 6 journals by now, now is the time to get this stuff out there. I've yet to read anything from you that hasn't made me sit down and say "Wow, why didn't I think of that!!" This my friend is no exception except for perhaps the fact that you've left me reeling with your talents on this one. I mean it about the publishing bit, if you need some suggestions were to send it, drop me a line. This stuff is great...the metaphores...man, what can I say? Wonderful work here |
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