Open Poetry #11 |
Depressed (dreary sorry) |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Depressed Lift your finger Press it down Straighten then your Highness crown Think so idly of your wants You knead me till I bleed Your helping hand Wants to lead Wants a more submissive breed Drum your fingers Then unwind Enrage the poor puppet’s mind Always give an inch or two Give, don’t ever think of you? From frightened face finally drains Yank the paupers binding chains! Wait ‘til lying dog creeps more Do you sleep? I pace the floor The chords, the chains, the puppet strings Unleash your beast to howl and sing Your inner void, my stomping grounds Depress your heart, a hollow sound For now and ever I am free For once, just once, You let go of me |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
WALT, you've penned another gem... It's a great write sweetie and me likes alot yuh... coco |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
wow Walt, Very powerful and emotional, sometimes it helps to vent, very good poem,,,,,, Hey RAGE on Walt it's good for the soul! After all poetry releases the heart, soul and mind.( of course the mind is the last to go hehe)or is that first! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Walt-Very strongly expressed. Excellent writing... Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Wowzerz! I can feel your words! I have this picture of Pinnochio as a puppet whose strings have been cut. He melts to the magnetic floorbottoms and begins his shortlived relaxation.... Mannnn, this is quite an image! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
powerful expressed, heart moving words....and don't sorry for writing this (dreary) one...poetry is ment to vent your heart, and start to heal it....and you have done very well ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanks all just feelin lil low release and let it go |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Walt~ you are awesome yuh! -SEA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes Walt I know the method...write and release...James |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx yuh to SEA and James |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Walt, Wonderfully powerful, very much liked, thank you. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Cerenity thanky yuh |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Great poem, Walt! One of your best. Corinne |
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