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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2000-12-16 04:36 PM



Need (Minor revision of a 2/2000 post)

(Early)
You look at me
One glance
My eyes
You see
You feel
My need
You

No fear
Instantly
In my arms
Your eyes
Register
The same longing

We just hold
A long hug
Savor the closeness
Two bodies
Sharing electricity
Exchanging heat

Our heads move then
Share a kiss
Longer
Soft
Open
Deep
As your need
Builds
Matching mine

Time disappears
Oblivious of everything
But us

(Much Later)
You say,
"Are you still hungry"
With a grin I reply,
"I'm up for what you are."


There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Mar

© Copyright 2000 Wilfred Yeats - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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with you
1 posted 2000-12-16 05:15 PM


Hey WY~ I'm ALWAYS hungry  


This is very hot! Enjoyed this very much!   -SEA

Wilfred Yeats
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2 posted 2000-12-16 07:27 PM


Sea -

You know what? Me too   Thank you - the devil made me do it  

jwesley
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3 posted 2000-12-16 07:31 PM


Hey, add me to this (growing) list of hungry.

Wonderful write, my friend.

jwesley

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4 posted 2000-12-16 10:50 PM


Bill, you really know how to pen them don't you??

Wonderful from you Sir. ..

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Sunshine
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5 posted 2000-12-16 10:53 PM


too quick
the glance
chanced
romance
before
the
good
bye

I so enjoy being inspired by you...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Paula Finn
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6 posted 2000-12-16 10:54 PM


MMMMMM how about some french toast...with warm sweet syrup...I'll let you lick my fingers hehehe...love this one

[This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 12-16-2000).]

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2000-12-16 11:26 PM


Our heads move then
Share a kiss
Longer
Soft
Open
Deep
As your need
Builds
Matching mine

Time disappears
Oblivious of everything
But us

=================
*sigh*
I almost remember what this is like...
excellent expressions  
nicey and spicy  
later-sensual-gator
jm

Some people find subtlety in strangers
if you find anything~let me in
Your eyes~you see everything
my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know

ethome
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8 posted 2000-12-17 03:00 AM


Oh that magic hunger! Very good WY you got the mood goin here in this one ...go get'em tiger!
serenity blaze
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9 posted 2000-12-17 03:11 AM


It's sort of like Chinese food, isn't it?

Very, very nice work here Wilfred.

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10 posted 2000-12-17 03:23 AM


*L* if the devil made you do it I can see why...beautiful bill...always


Greeneyes~


"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown


shira
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11 posted 2000-12-17 08:37 AM


This is SO lovely and sensitive, and true to feeling.. I love it. I really do.
Lady Lightning
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12 posted 2000-12-17 09:16 AM


Very good..I liked this alot..I have to agree with everyone else..Made me Hungry as well...    ~LL~

The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown

Wilfred Yeats
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13 posted 2000-12-17 10:38 AM


I'm so happy I whetted everyone's appetite   Thank you all so much
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