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Never Goodbye |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Never Goodbye I lament a dove that flew away She left a rhyme a verse to stay. Wrapped in starlights delicate thread On my pillow next to my head. It said goodbye and did not know Goodbye could eclipse a rainbow In misty mist and teary seem In colors of her hopes and dream. And as I read it made me sigh. Her misinterpret of goodbye Dissolving of the rainbows bright Disappearing from her sight. She said the shadows would remain The glow would always haunt, sustain And she would listen each new morrow Winds that carry yesterdays borrow. I sorrow in the deepest gloom The passage of the rainbows bloom. There's nothing that I would not give To touch our moment in relive. The door to my soul is ajar And soul to soul is never far. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ This is one of the prettiest pieces I've ever read. How gentle the phrases bestow your thoughts to these eyes. A true joy to behold on this day. I will hold this piece in my heart for a long, long time. ~*Marge*~< !signature--> ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 11-19-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Wrapped in starlights delicate thread On my pillow next to my head. It said goodbye and did not know Goodbye could eclipse a rainbow In misty mist and teary seem In colors of her hopes and dream. She said the shadows would remain The glow would always haunt, sustain And she would listen each new morrow Winds that carry yesterdays borrow. I sorrow in the deepest gloom The passage of the rainbows bloom. There's nothing that I would not give To touch our moment in relive. The door to my soul is ajar And soul to soul is never far. ================ oh Sy-guy you write my heart today in this amazing gift ... this is so touching in its fragile longing .. in its melancholy beauty. yes, this is a jewel for the hearts treasure chest. "Wrapped in starlights delicate thread" wow ...is that a diamond line or what "There's nothing that I would not give To touch our moment in relive." *sigh* ... my hearstrings are being played by that line ... me winkiewinkies go blinkieblinkie for this one sweet Sy ...  later-ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethis-gator me "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What a beautiful poem Seymour just a great write...a lot of class!! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Seymour, Alas, the door is always open. It awaits one with the courage to enter in. Wonderful writing.  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ahh, when words do fail us and we can't take them back too late to explain... So poingant, Seymour. Corinne |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, You write the nicest comments. *L* JM, Dear winkiewinkie blinkieblinkie you are something else. *L* Sy Ethome, It takes class to know class. Lone Wolf, Thanks for the wonderful. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is absolutely exquisitely written! Poignant and haunting love story, my favorite kind of poetry. Your talent is very great, my friend. The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Seymour, I concur with Marge this is one of my prized poems written by you... So delicately weaved with tenderness it's a rare jewel to find one like this, and I thank you for a most enjoyable read... Coco "She said the shadows would remain the glow would always haunt, sustain" It's kinda difficult to select one verse from the beauty of the whole poem but this one quoted purely captivated this reader... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This dove must continue to fly... wonderful, Sy... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rosemary, Beautiful comment from a wonderful poet. Coco, I am so glad you enjoyed. Sunshine, You noticed. *L* |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow - this is very powerful, Sy. Love the ending, much wisdom as well as beauty lies in your words. Michael |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Michael, A pat from one that writes so well is a pat indeed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sir, I always will "notice"... so this MUST fly... once more... for you, as I do know those that are most special... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Big_Dude New Member
since 2000-11-19
Posts 2 |
How poignant a verse, makes me feel lament for your loss. Am heartened that the door is never closed -good byes need not be for ever. Big_Dude |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Thanks *L* Big-Dude, What you say is true, thanks for the comment. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Today I needed this, saw a gleam like a sweet kiss, so from this place uniquely remarkable [see, no rusting], and with a little dusting, and a lot of care, I took a dare, as I shall loose it and send it forth again, for a very, very special friend... |
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