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athena4
Senior Member

since 2000-12-10

Posts 622

0 posted 2000-12-15 10:54 AM

Abandonment

I stare frozen in fascination
of my abandonment.
I can still feel pieces of you all over me.

Bewitched in transcendental memories
that now lye abyss.
Silence benumbs me,
as I struggle to forget
the azure skies and crimson dusks
you painted in my eyes.

I feel the colors running off the canvas,
as my eyes baptize my emptiness
in acrimony.

I remember the softness of the glory
we adorned,
in the facets of each other's bodies as one.
Together we lay candescent.

And now,
I sleep alone.
Cold, marose.

Paralyzed,
as your paintings have all faded.
Your good-bye engraved itself on your
last step out my door.

I throw aback the sheets,
as I witness the vanishing embers
turn to cinders,
...on your side of the bed.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2000-12-15 11:03 AM

this is so descriptive........puts wonderful images in my mind.......loved how you wrote this

-SEA

athena4
Senior Member

since 2000-12-10

Posts 622

2 posted 2000-12-15 11:45 AM

SEA,
Thank you so much. I hope you have only beautiful images, and the dreams to go with them.
Elise

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2000-12-15 12:10 PM

Wow, superb imagery, and of course I have been there. I can say that to all the poems here except the happy ones

This is one of my favorites
Sandra

Dream as if you'll live forever; Live as if you'll die today.
— James Dean

Lady Lightning
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 422
Kentucky

4 posted 2000-12-15 12:17 PM

I to have to agree with catalinamoon..Been here..I could feel so much in your words...Made me sad yet happy at the same time..BTW..I don't think I've welcomed you here yet...If I have, well, Welcome again!!..

You are gonna love it here...

~LL~

The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown

athena4
Senior Member

since 2000-12-10

Posts 622

5 posted 2000-12-15 03:05 PM

Lady,
You're sweet. Thank you for the wonderful welcome! I hope to read and respond to you, and hear from you again.
Much love, Elise

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2000-12-15 05:58 PM

Not a good feeling...a total lack of happiness...James

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

7 posted 2000-12-15 06:08 PM

*sigh* I share your pain, dear one. You have expressed it so very clearly that it brings back vivid memories and has my heart going out to you. Much love to you from me.
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Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2000-12-15 10:28 PM

quote:
I throw aback the sheets,
as I witness the vanishing embers
turn to cinders,
...on your side of the bed.

this shows the depths of the loss. . . the thing is, even the cinders can still burn. . . and the pain is still felt. . .

powerful from you athena. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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