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artsygrl
Member

since 2000-11-17

Posts 55
Florida

0 posted 2000-12-14 03:43 PM

Rebellious would be more polite
I am tired of being patient
impatience
Sometimes I just want to say it and not twist the words around cleanly

I am a sloppy painter because no one tells me to stay in the lines

No one tells me to be neat with the paint
Paint covers my body
NO one tells me to be clean

That is my own world,
I like it there without your rules

The words are not staying within the lines,
I am repeating out of order,
over using

I am not perfecting
I am not organizing
And the picture is not pretty,
But neither are the words
-Barbara M. Brewer-
03-20-99

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2000-12-14 03:46 PM

Why stay within the lines if it isn't you? I wouldn't either and DON'T. Wonderful way to express your thoughts and I am glad that I read.

A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses.
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Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

2 posted 2000-12-14 11:09 PM

really enjoyed this a lot! love your
style...so never change. and who cares
if you're not in the line. you're YOU
and that's all that matters! take care
~amy~

~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

3 posted 2000-12-15 01:29 AM

"And the picture is not pretty,
But neither are the words"

that's one of those lines that's so good you think "why didn't i think of that?"
i'm adding this one to my library. inspiring. that's the only word that comes to mind.
i dig it. like, with-a-shovel-kind-of-dig-it.

You don't hear much about guys who take their shot and miss...

artsygrl
Member

since 2000-11-17

Posts 55
Florida

4 posted 2000-12-15 05:38 PM

Wow, thankyou Mark, Aimster adn Ethan Halo, you are making me see I should be freer in my writing thankyou for your wonderfully sweet replies

artsygrl

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

5 posted 2000-12-15 05:49 PM

You have a style all your own and that makes you uniquely talented. Wonderful poem. Much love to you from me.
http://www.geocities.com/karenltorbiak/index.html

artsygrl
Member

since 2000-11-17

Posts 55
Florida

6 posted 2000-12-16 01:40 PM

thanks starttime, means allot!

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