Open Poetry #11 |
The Tryst |
Sunshine
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come the assignation secret rendevous dwell here a small while in the gloom consult thy heart see that there is room for only one my one love in this tryst of hearts never part ever beloved the flower plucked to scent thy bed and give heady thy fragrance light throughout our night adoring delight untress my hair and let it lay cross your chest sit with me at foot of brier let thy love lift to the higher element and be then heaven sent Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
How romantic and quite "Victorian" in feel--written with your usual gentle grace! Very, very, lovely, Karilea! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I love the romantic, old fashioned flavor of this wonderful poem. It was dreamy. Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sunshine, you can take a phrase like "untress my hair" an make it sound sooooo sensual! Such a beautiful flavor to this poem I can almost taste it.. |
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Sunshine
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Serenity, I had hoped it would have that flavor...thank you... Startime, I'm glad you like it too...thank you... Balladeer...who wants to taste hair? Yuch....LOL....only you could get me to say that...but I appreciate the rest of the comment...thank you for peeking in... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, another excellant beautiful flowing and liquid piece. This is exquisite, I really love this one. And you are truly inspired. So okay now for your story, do Persephone, I can't wait to see that. Utterly magical love. I know, it's want, want, want with me. What if I say please Take care kid Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
You write at a level I strive to attain, my friend, and in a manner I adore...Romance and it's many ways are a passion of mine...guess I'll have to try harder though... loved this. jwesley |
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Sunshine
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Marsha, I will need to do a LOT of research before I'm ready to tackle Persephone...I'm just dabbling now...hoping you approve... and James?...I am never completely satisfied with my work (when it's first out, but then later...sigh) but you and I shall strive together...time and patience is on our side, hey?... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
*bowing* lady fair, I am amazed at the poem that graces this page the words within telling so soft of a warmth that holds aloft. . . wonderful your grace. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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Thank you Sven, kind words indeed... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
BEAUTIFUL in every sense.... "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"Heavenly shades of night are falling it's twilight time. Out of the mist your voice is calling it's twilight time. When purple colored curtains mark the end of day, I'll see you again at twilight time." "Deep in the dark your kiss will thrill me like days of old. Lighting the spark of love that fills me with dreams untold each day I pray for evening just to be with you together again at twilight time." Ah! the romance of a lover's rendevous.... this is beautiful Karilea!!! |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A ray of Victorian Sunshine is a very refreshing one indeed... Nicely done, Kari.. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, I do approve, I think you have found a deep vein of inspiration and its mixing with your fabulous talent to make something awesome. Truly first rate love, it really is excellant. There's me with my little flag waving in the corner, can you see me. Take care love Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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Irish, thank you... Ethome, now I won't get the tune out of my head all day...I'm glad this made you think of this song...one of my favorites...and I know how you like the "romantic pieces..." thank you... Nan, thank you....you know how I treasure your comments.... Marsha, it's a very deep vein, and it is very, very golden in color...thank you for being that inspiration.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ like a romantic dream........beautiful........and I agree with Balladeer -SEA |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Beautiful images, this is just how a tryst should be.. I am a victorian princess, did you know? Love this. Sandra Dream as if you'll live forever; Live as if you'll die today. — James Dean |
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