Open Poetry #11 |
Derived From Your Heartbeats |
snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
This is dedicated to a very special and important person in my life. If you listen closely, The sound you hear Is the melody of serenity. Can’t you see? My heart is in the music; My soul lies in the harmony. There really hasn’t been anything I’ve been dwelling on lately Other than this peace That took me over In those short hours We were together. I could lie there forever, Whether you’re sleeping or not, And just listen to you breathe. And, there really isn’t anywhere I’d rather be Than there with you again, On that bed of tranquility, Where, in the silence, The intensity of your love Consumed my already-burning heart. So, if you listen closely, That sound you hear Is the melody of serenity Derived from your heartbeats.< !signature--> 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... [This message has been edited by snowpants (edited 12-13-2000).] |
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raleighbttrfly Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 160Raleigh NC |
You put some grate lines in this one. I rember feeling like that and this opme realy brought those feelings back vary well done. Beginnings are scary, endings are usually sad, but it’s the middle that counts. |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Kris, You should write Hallmark cards......this is absolutely beautiful and heartfelt. I enjoyed this poem alot.....you've captured my thoughts and feelings with this one. This is how i feel when i'm with Amy. Take Care, Laura |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
SnowPants: Excellent poem. It brought tears to my eyes it was so sweet and I can imagine the peace you felt. I wish it was possible to just bottle up good happy feelings and take them out when your sad. Aimster was right, you are a good poet. Take care. ~Lisa~ ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Kris~ excellent poem! this was simply beautiful. you've captured my thoughts and feelings when im with the one i love! thanks laura for that sweet comment and lisa you are so cute! love ya all!! ~amy~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very beautiful words here. Much enjoyed. I like the happy you Sandra |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kris, this is really beautiful, you have written the wonder of love. Absolutely wonderful work, and I love it. Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
raleighbttrfly: thanks! glad you like it! Laura: hey there! thank you for your kind reply! glad you could stop by! Lisa: you are too sweet. thank you. I'm glad you liked it!! Aims: hey girlie! always good to see ya! thanks, my friend!! -e ~~~~~ Sandra: so do I! thanks!! Marsha: thank you for your thoughtful reply! I am glad you could stop by!! sp 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My friend, you look so lovely wearing love. So nice to see you shining lately in this wonderful heart of yours. Hugs to you and a kiss if he don't mind. JUST A SMALL ONE YA KNOW!!! A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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shira Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 88Hamburg, PA |
Wow, this is beautiful. What a feeling of total bliss.. I liked this a lot. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Mark: thank you, my sweet friend. thanks for the kiss too. (and, I wouldn't worry about 'him' too much. I'm sure 'he' won't mind!!) shira: thank you! I am so glad you enjoyed it!! sp 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
simply beautiful.... ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I truly enjoyed this piece, but these words in particular I loved... "That sound you hear Is the melody of serenity" jwesley |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
LL: thanks! glad you liked it!! jwesley: thank you for your reply! I'm glad you enjoyed it!! sp 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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